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DEAR DIARY *** "Every day is a page to write a new story". *** Sunday        I wasn't sure dear diary, would I find a new home here                    Would this be a permanent place to live without leaving Monday        This morning I greeted them with a smile so wide                    Hoping they would accept this frightened, tiny me Tuesday       Hello diary, my little sister does seem subdued                    Like me she doesn't speak, but she seems quite wise Wednesday  Dear diary, my father is indifferent, avoiding me                    Does not treat me like family, more like an assistant Thursday     Quick scribbled note today, my mother wants my healing                    From illness and from gayness, She's praying every day Friday          I spoke to my social worker, I cannot live there anymore                    The care for me is too hard, they want me to go away   Saturday     Hello my quiet friend, today writing is so painful                   I packed my things to leave, can't speak, too broken                                                      *** Today         My sister wants me with her, she fixed a room for me                   She loves me and embraces me, I think I will go                  Tomorrow    I will have a home, and I will start brand new                   I will make this work, my diary, we turn this page, we're blank. *** 2nd place in contest: Quote Response Sponsor: Nayda Ivette Negron December 5, 2016

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Date: 12/25/2016 6:53:00 PM
This is such a creative approach. I am glad that it ended on a happy note. Great idea. Congratulations.
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Darren White
Date: 12/26/2016 12:19:00 AM
Thank you Janis, it just asked for this approach :)
Date: 12/25/2016 11:52:00 AM
It's really touching. I totally agree with Tamal, the way you expressed is really so raw and therefore seems real. Is this really your story or is it a fiction? I hope u don't mind me asking this. By the way, congratulations on your win.
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Darren White
Date: 12/25/2016 11:59:00 AM
Hello Afzal thank you, this is part of my story yes, it's not fiction. You are allowed to ask :)
Date: 12/25/2016 5:54:00 AM
Darren, I like how you turned this into diary pages. Much conflict each day, but you show how one day there is hope and you keep writing! Congrats!
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Darren White
Date: 12/25/2016 6:54:00 AM
Yeah, that is exactly what I intended with it. Thank you :)
Date: 12/25/2016 12:45:00 AM
Darren, this is a superlative of a poem. The narrator's emotions are laid raw and bare. Congrats on your win.
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Darren White
Date: 12/25/2016 12:51:00 AM
Thank you for these wonderful words, my friend! I am glad you recognized the emotion in there.
Date: 12/24/2016 10:05:00 PM
Congratulations Darren.
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Darren White
Date: 12/24/2016 10:50:00 PM
Ohhh, THANK you :) I am honoured!
Date: 12/6/2016 9:43:00 PM
Good luck on the contest my friend! Wonderfully written... A new start in a new place, surrounded by love and acceptance - this warms my heart and brings a smile to my face. A new beginning so well deserved... :* <3
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Claudia Polydoro
Date: 12/7/2016 4:46:00 AM
Pretzel fingers crossed, but I already have a gut feeling that it will be a great one for you guys <3
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Darren White
Date: 12/6/2016 11:35:00 PM
Yes :) Looking forward to Christmas this year for the first time ever. <3
Date: 12/6/2016 6:49:00 AM
Blank pages, a clean slate, couldn't have written it better Darren! Good luck, it's deserving of a win in its unique capture.
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Darren White
Date: 12/6/2016 12:12:00 PM
Hi Paloma! I am glad you like it, it just asked for this format :)
Date: 12/6/2016 4:21:00 AM
This is such a creative way to have approached this!
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Darren White
Date: 12/6/2016 4:29:00 AM
Thank you Rebecca. . I saw it literally before me.
Date: 12/5/2016 2:46:00 PM
This was so cool Darren, sad at points but smile producing at the end. I love how you formatted this, it is perfect for the challenge. Good luck.
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Darren White
Date: 12/5/2016 2:49:00 PM
Thanks Chris, yes, I am glad for the smile at the end :)
Date: 12/5/2016 2:11:00 PM
Wow Darren - This has me speechless. Thank you for showing what people go through and God Bless you. Stay strong :) Good luck in the contest.
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Darren White
Date: 12/5/2016 2:22:00 PM
Heidi, thank you. You stay strong too :)
Date: 12/5/2016 1:08:00 PM
A very powerful poem that exposes the under belly of society
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Darren White
Date: 12/5/2016 1:25:00 PM
Thank you, and yes it does!

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