Puzzled

War Sorrow Smoke filled sky A baby cries What is this blindness that destroys our lives?

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Sue Mason

Date: 8/6/2009 9:00:00 AM

Have you entered this wonderful write in Deborah Guzzi's contest? I've never tried this form which is similar to a cinquain ... so many different ones here at the Soup .... LOL

Date: 8/4/2009 5:20:00 PM

Powerful piece captured in this challenging form. I like the question at the end--leaves the reader with something to think about. Keep on writing! Karen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/4/2009 10:44:00 AM

Good afternoon Jim. I enjoyed reading your wonderful poem today. Love, Carol

James Peranteau

Date: 8/4/2009 7:43:00 AM

Perfect Tetractys Jim ! And an aw inspiring one at that ! Bravo to you for using poetic form and making mine heart leap! I'm sure others as well ! james