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Puttin’ on the Ritz She went to London where the gold-paved streets glittered not in rainy foggy mornings. In vain she knocked on doors in search of fame. Uttered from beyond thick lighted cigars, idle promises drifted hazily, like suffocating smoke that filled the air. Her talents never stood an acting chance, but offers came dependant on her looks, the long toned legs, attractive sex appeal. Clinging to hope, she bit at proffered bait, she gave her all, and acted at his will, away from the bright lights of screen or stage. She played the part of mistress to her man; she lacked for nothing and lived like a queen, but in the process she gave up her dreams. She had the jewellery and choice of clothes most fashionable and extravagant, while hobnobbing with high society. Sadly, she lived a life that was not hers, following a dull script of make-belief. Her heart was torn, her soul deceived and worn. The pain within became too much to bear. She knew no joy; had only grief to share. Her life she took – a victim of despair. ------------------------------------------------------ Paul Callus ~ 6th September, 2015 Contest: Puttin’ on the Ritz Sponsor: Judy Konos Placed 1st

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Date: 9/12/2015 8:16:00 PM
Very different interpretation. Congratulations on your worthy win. Joyce
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/13/2015 4:24:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by, Joyce. Hope you are keeping well:) Glad that you like my Puttin’ on the Ritz entry. ~ Take care. // paul
Date: 9/12/2015 7:22:00 PM
Paul, congratulations on your win with this moving piece, it was well deserved:-)Alexis 7
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Date: 9/13/2015 4:28:00 PM
Thank you for reading and liking, Alexis:) (I admire your strength and fighting spirit...you make a great mum!!) Regards // paul
Date: 9/10/2015 10:58:00 PM
Exquisite write Paul! Congrats on a wonderful win!
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Date: 9/12/2015 3:22:00 PM
Thank you, Upma. I have just read your winning entry...it's a most worthy winner! // paul
Date: 9/10/2015 9:38:00 PM
big congrats, Paul . I do believe all were winners.... almost. hahaha!
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Date: 9/12/2015 3:10:00 PM
Thank you Andrea! Glad you can still laugh at a disappointing result. I did enjoy your entry:) // paul
Date: 9/10/2015 4:15:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2015 4:50:00 PM
its getting autumnal here Paul the trees are starting to turn - i love this time of year:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/10/2015 4:48:00 PM
Thank you, Jan. ~ At last we have had some rain and the temperature has gone slightly down! Hugs // paul
Date: 9/10/2015 1:20:00 PM
Paul, Congrats on your "Puttin On The Ritz WIN.." SKAT
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Date: 9/10/2015 2:39:00 PM
Thank you for being a messenger of good news, Skat:) hugs // paul
Date: 9/10/2015 10:46:00 AM
Thank you for being in my contest
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Date: 9/10/2015 2:37:00 PM
It has been my pleasure, Judy:) Thank you! ~ All the best. // paul
Date: 9/8/2015 2:28:00 AM
Wow, this one turned dark cast...it is the way of people who live their lives for luxury and money, they are often left feeling empty. I used to know someone exactly like this, after her looks faded she lost everything. A great entry Paul.
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Date: 9/8/2015 4:41:00 PM
Hi Connie:) The lure of success is like a magnet and it effects one's balanced judgment. When the lustre fades depression can set in. ~ Thank you for reading; hope life is being kind:) Take care. // paul
Date: 9/8/2015 1:43:00 AM
Hello Paul... nicely written story Paul with the moral... be true to yourself - thank you Paul - good luck - Lindsay
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Date: 9/8/2015 4:44:00 PM
Thank you Lindsay. Living a life of make-belief can easily lead to great unhappiness. ~ All the best. // paul
Date: 9/6/2015 4:56:00 PM
I love your take on the theme Paul - Marilyn Monroe sprang to mind when I read it and i see from the comments I was right - i have a large print of her in my lounge:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/7/2015 5:36:00 AM
Thank you Jan! I tried to look at the theme from a different angle; hopefully I succeeded. Good health and happiness are more important than success. hugs // paul
Date: 9/6/2015 1:01:00 PM
Your write is wow to read.... You brought your write in the mind and sense of the readers.... I'm in awe of your write........A.M.
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Date: 9/7/2015 5:25:00 AM
I am pleased that you enjoyed this poem, Afolabi. Thank you for reading! // paul
Date: 9/6/2015 6:26:00 AM
wow, a different take on the theme, paul.. so well done, so utterly deep!.. huggs
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Date: 9/6/2015 8:48:00 AM
I do rely on your feedback, Nette! Thank you for being such a supportive friend. Hugs // paul
Date: 9/6/2015 1:19:00 AM
Excellent write Paul. colors of life you displayed it well here... hugs.. =`)~Olive Eloisa
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Date: 9/6/2015 3:46:00 AM
If I get it right, it's good evening to you Olive_eloi:) Thank you for reading and for the nice comments. Take care & hugs // paul
Date: 9/6/2015 12:59:00 AM
oh my, you turned the theme into tragedy. And that is part of life as well! Great innovative way to do the topic, Paul! Mine is so lame (will be posting it by the end of the week!)
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Date: 9/6/2015 3:43:00 AM
Good morning Andrea! Putting on the Ritz could be both funny or tragic; I chose the latter. Used 10 syllable unrhymed lines, but could not help using rhyme in the final stanza! Will check out your Ritz entry. // paul

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