Prince

He tides me, Like the moon stirs the seas- Pulling me in, pushing me Out, Burying my feet in the sand As if to say- "I don't want you to go, I don't want you to stay"

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Skat A

Date: 5/24/2015 11:15:00 PM

LORA, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. SKAT love

Lora Robinson
Date: 5/24/2015 11:53:00 PM

Hey! Thank you, I'm proud to be featured only a month into my membership

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/13/2015 12:25:00 PM

Lora, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@"

Poet Destroyer A
Date: 5/13/2015 12:25:00 PM

p.s. nice and sweet

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/12/2015 7:18:00 PM

Listening to what you said to Linda below I would tell you this piece is not fleshed out enough yet [and yes if a verse is on Soup most publishers will consider it published and a reprint] remember to let the reader know why you wrote this- you have give a single view of a lover and how he affects you- who is He? Prince? say Prince give your pronouns names.Why does he affect you this way? how? when? where? Light & love

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/13/2015 11:27:00 AM

prehaps she meant not use HIS name - use a diverent name - even My Lover tides me like the moon stirs the sea - is better than He.

Lora Robinson
Date: 5/12/2015 7:22:00 PM

And it's a reference to the movie Prince of Tides. My professor Nancy Mitchell-Ebert suggested I not use his name. I would love to inbox you pieces I am going to submit for publishing. For the poems I posting here I am not going to publish for a longtime.

Lora Robinson
Date: 5/12/2015 7:20:00 PM

I'm not looking to publish this poem yet.

Skat A

Date: 5/12/2015 3:06:00 PM

Lora, I have a prince in my life. LOL, and yes I am way to deep in sand to even want to leave.... Gosh, I love this... What happen to your first poem? Anyways, thank you for the visit... SKAT

Lora Robinson
Date: 5/12/2015 3:31:00 PM

A PM suggested to not put my best work online because publishers want pieces relatively unread. It's my best piece so when it gets published I will post all of them again. For now I'm focusing on submitting pieces that need a lot of work shopping.