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Pretense of Love

If you were not going to Love me in the morning, You should have crept away Into the moonlight, Faceless You should have left Before the daylight Burst into the bedroom With sparkling hope You should not have stayed Lingered Loitered Laughing in my kitchen Drinking from my plastic mug Acting as If You were going to throw Your painted mask Into the fire No You should have Faded away Like an echo into a canyon Like a name on the tip of a tongue Like a dream almost recalled -- The only clue that you were here An indentation in my sheets I could have smoothed away Instead of This This pretense of love Of normalcy, Of old lovers on An ordinary day, When you won’t even Look me in the eye -- If there is no hope Of love Of a you and me, an “us” Then please just LEAVE I fiercely prefer The fleeting memory

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/20/2013 10:42:00 AM
Great write and Great win... You really deserve it~A.O
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Date: 4/20/2013 6:29:00 AM
great write and win Susan...congrats
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Date: 4/19/2013 9:49:00 PM
Susan, Congratulations IN HONOR OF Andrea's favorite POEM contest. *Always & Forever' @->- LINDA -<-@
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Date: 4/19/2013 9:35:00 PM
Many congrats my dear friend Susan! This is indeed great and amazing heartfelt write! I love it so much & so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing this gem of yours! Big hugs in return! Have a grace-filled day! Love and hugs, Leonora
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Date: 4/19/2013 8:38:00 PM
Susan, a sweet win~*~SKAT
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Date: 11/14/2012 7:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Nathan's "Free Verse Writers" contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/12/2012 12:52:00 PM
THANKXX SUSAN FOR CHOOSING MY ENTRY AS A WINNER FOR ANY POEM CONTEST LUV .. AM SO HAPPY U ENJOY MY WORDS .. AS I DO YOURS LUV ..
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Date: 11/12/2012 9:09:00 AM
well penned Susan.....congrats on your win and thank you so much for mine...
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Date: 11/11/2012 11:26:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR BIG WIN MY DEAR FRIEND SUSAN! CHEERS! Thank you so much for sharing and also for my placement in your "Wrongfully Imprisonment" contest. More power and graces to you always! love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 11/11/2012 11:12:00 PM
CONGRATS SUSAN ON A TREMENDOUS WRITE AND WIN FOR FREE VERSE LUV .. ALSO THANKXX FOR MY WINNING PLACE IN WRONGFUL IMPRISONMENT .. A GREAT CHALLENGE LUV ..
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Date: 11/11/2012 7:27:00 PM
' Good win' Nate
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Date: 2/7/2012 5:54:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Susan! Love, Kim
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Date: 2/7/2012 1:21:00 PM
congrats Susan on a stupendous win for this elegant entry luv.. great emotional lines that reach into the depth of the heart ...
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Date: 2/7/2012 1:13:00 PM
congrats on your contest win, this one cuts like a knife...I've read the razor's edge of your poetry before; you're a powerful writer...
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Date: 2/7/2012 11:55:00 AM
Congratulations to you on your placement in Debbie Guzzi's "Your Own Favorite Poem" contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/7/2012 10:07:00 AM
This is beautiful Sue. A sentiment not restricted to the fairer sex. We men too have been played. Congratulations
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Date: 2/7/2012 9:47:00 AM
Congrats, Sue. Awesome write. Well deserved win. Nice going. Best to you and yours. luv Ralph
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Date: 2/7/2012 9:01:00 AM
so true Sue there was a point when I wanted THEM to feel the way they make us feel..I did it once or twice to 'try on' the behavior..I'm glad to say I was as disgusted with myself when I acted that way as I was with them/men! Congrad's on your fine win. Light & Love
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Date: 1/24/2012 6:16:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments on my writings Susan. You are very observent when you read. Yes I did a repost but changed it up some with help from Andrea. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/22/2012 8:18:00 AM
wow, I love this one. Full of anger, just match with what I feel rite now. A dark poem, excellent, Susan.
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Date: 1/21/2012 4:12:00 PM
MORe poems, sweetie!!! just dropping by to say hi.
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Date: 1/19/2012 10:51:00 PM
An Excellent free verse poem filled with the kind of emotion that cuts deep and leaves one understanding that empty feeling that remains long after.
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Date: 1/15/2012 6:09:00 PM
Susan ! excellent description of a situational feeling... You have captured it's essence here in this write and a powerful send off.... I fiercely prefer... the fleeting memory... great job of it. I bet you feel like you have captured it. nice. If I write a poem no matter what it entails and I get the "I captured what I wanted to say"thing, I know my write is a success. Matters not what anyone else says. cool. You done done it.
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Date: 1/15/2012 6:01:00 PM
WOWOWOW, THIS is one of your best. Don't ever think you can't write free verse. you just did! FAVE.
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