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Poignant Passion

Shrouded in dark purple cloak I behold your languid gaze Tears glisten on your face Heart with poignant passion filled -------------------------------------------- Author: Paul Callus ~ 28th July 2014 Contest: The Passion of a Jue Ju Sponsor: Nette Onclaud Placing: 5th

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/22/2016 3:50:00 PM

A very good jueju, Paul. A striking purple shrouded image. Beautiful line ... tears glisten on your face. Very fine poem, Paul. Much love to you. RW

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/2/2014 2:55:00 PM

Dropping by to say hello... :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/2/2014 4:29:00 PM

How very lovely to have you coming into my parlour!! Missing your presence on Soup and looking forward to new posts....I check on you every day. [Jade is ok, but Eileen is much missed:)] hugs // paul

Leon Enriquez

Date: 8/22/2014 7:20:00 PM

Dear Paul: Nicely done. Leon

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2014 10:29:00 AM

Thank you Leon. Have just been on your posts....trying to catch up with a lot that has been going on while I was on holiday (...and it's not at all easy!!) regards.........paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 8/6/2014 8:31:00 PM

Congratulations, dear Paul, on this great win! Super romantic and passionate - I love this special Jueju, my friend!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 3:13:00 AM

Good morning Pandita (here in Malta it's 10am)! Your super comments have made my day:) Thank you for yet another encouraging visit. You are a supportive friend! // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/5/2014 6:20:00 PM

Wonderful Entry! I enjoyed it a LOT :) grats on your win, you rock:)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2014 8:38:00 AM

Thank you Casarah! Love your adorable comments:) So glad you found this short poem to your liking. Have a nice day! // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/4/2014 8:53:00 PM

This is one of my three favorites in this contest. All three rate far above my entry. Big congrats on this write and the win you got with it my friend!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/5/2014 5:05:00 AM

Thank you; your kind comments are appreciated, Robert. As I commented on your post, I expected your entry to place higher...it too was one of my favs. Have a nice day! // paul

Frederic Parker

Date: 8/4/2014 7:33:00 PM

Not sadness but tenderness, congratulations Paul a very moving poem

Paul Callus
Date: 8/5/2014 4:57:00 AM

You describe it well, my friend. Thank you for stopping by with wishes and lovely comments. // paul

David Mohn

Date: 8/4/2014 6:59:00 PM

Such a melecholy feel Paul…love this take on passion even more than the first time I read it…congrats

Paul Callus
Date: 8/5/2014 4:54:00 AM

Thank you David; glad you confirmed your initial positive opinion of this write. Have a nice day. // paul

John Lawless

Date: 8/4/2014 6:45:00 PM

Paul, I sense the hint of sadness, longing, separation in this wonderful entry.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/5/2014 3:45:00 AM

Thank you John; I'm glad that the intended feelings have been passed on...your comments confirm that! Have a nice day. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2014 4:33:00 PM

yes, I recall this one, and the title is so unique too!! Congrats on your win, my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2014 5:17:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Yours has been an excellent entry...still in my mind your touching concluding words; "let me flower"....:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/4/2014 10:40:00 AM

Paul my congratulations..:) I'm in Phil..:) safe and sound with my mom..:) still so much to do

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2014 5:13:00 PM

Thank you dear Olive_eloi for making the time to stop by even when your time is taken up through travelling! So happy for you that you arrived safe and sound. Stay positive...and God bless. Hugs // paul

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/4/2014 10:09:00 AM

lovely poignant moments, Paul. congrats for a fine jue ju win. Mohan

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2014 5:09:00 PM

Thank you, Mohan. Your 'invite' was too irresistible not to be put high on the winners' list! // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/4/2014 7:47:00 AM

Yes, very poignant passionate write, congrats. Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2014 5:02:00 PM

Thank you, Dr. any comment from you is always appreciated. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/4/2014 7:24:00 AM

Real poignant write Paul! Congrats on huge win !

Kelly Deschler

Date: 8/3/2014 11:44:00 PM

These words are so beautiful, with just a hint of mystery to them.... I really enjoyed reading your poem tonight. Very nice work, Paul! Good luck in Nette's contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2014 6:30:00 AM

Good day Kelly. Having a visit from you is a lovely way to start off another busy week! Thank you...your welcome comments are very supportive and encouraging:) // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/3/2014 6:25:00 PM

My friend, you have done yourself proud with this one! Crackin' good!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2014 6:21:00 AM

Thank you my friend...I appreciate your lovely comments and sincere support. take care. // paul

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/31/2014 10:40:00 AM

Poignant, indeed. I enjoyed your write very much and wish you the best in the contest. Happy writing and God bless you.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/31/2014 5:56:00 PM

Many thanks Regina; so glad you enjoyed this write. I notice that you have adapted yourself quite well to Soup and your posts keep arriving at regular intervals. Hope you find enjoyment and fulfillment through writing and new friends, here. Take care // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/30/2014 11:02:00 AM

Dear Paul, I can see the image you created so clearly. It doesn't matter that I'm not familiar with the form. This is great artistry. Wishing you success in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 7/30/2014 11:13:00 AM

Hello Carolyn! So glad you are enjoying this write. The form does not affect the reader much; it's the author who has to deal with word count! Thank you for your lovely comments; I'm honoured! (I caught you just in time...been having a hard job with internet and soup.) love & peace paul

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/30/2014 10:29:00 AM

Oh .......wow, this is truly beautiful.....the most gorgeous words, (poignant/languid).....simply elegant !!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/30/2014 10:59:00 AM

Thank you, Carrie...so glad you find this to your liking! touched by your enthusiastic words! // paul

Robert Nehls

Date: 7/30/2014 2:38:00 AM

A brief emotional scene, Paul. This one is open to so many possibilities. Very well written, my friend..... Robert.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/30/2014 10:45:00 AM

Thank you Robert. Yes, it is open to different possibilities and interpretations. That flower picture is so very inspiring! // paul

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/29/2014 8:39:00 PM

This is so brief yet colossal brilliance of a perturbed passion Paul. I pine for encore to this gem of mysterious, dark passion. " languid gaze " , that's heart jolting! I also wanted to thank you for your kind praise on my collaboration write LUST BECOMING. "Eve" and I truly appreciate the attentive view from a veteran writer. Our Adam and Eve saga is so special for us, and to have great writers respect our rendition of that Lengend is so very encouraging, and priceless Paul,thank you! J.A.B.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/30/2014 3:38:00 AM

Hi Justin! Thank you so much for appreciating the contents of this 'brief' Jue Ju. I believe that often we can deliver a lot in a few words and then readers are left free to let their own imagination run riot. Your poetry is expressive, deep, strong, honest, coming over as fresh yet hot and romantic as well. Keep the passion burning! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2014 5:48:00 PM

VERY nice entry for the contest, Paul. Much enjoyed.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/30/2014 3:06:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea!...love capital letters:)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/29/2014 12:54:00 PM

How beautiful this is..If I was a judge this would have a top score.Guess Nettie is going to love this .To my favourites.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 4:22:00 PM

This is what I love about poetry...our reaction to the work of others! I manage to see so much beauty in what others write, yet most of the time fail to see the same in mine! So glad you found this to your liking, Charm, and thank you for the fav and great comments. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/29/2014 2:01:00 AM

After seeing that lovely flower photo, your poem blends so beautifully with it, right down to the tear drops. I love where you took this poem Paul. You are a brilliant poet! I don't know how Nette could not love this entry. I do!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 8:15:00 AM

Many thanks Connie! Your comments are most encouraging and sweet to my ears:) I appreciate the faith you show in this poem and hope that many others will get some joy out of it. Take care. // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/28/2014 10:26:00 PM

I do not know that style, but this poem, well it sure has style. I am curious the meaning of this, as I could come up with 2 completely different ones!! Great write Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 7:51:00 AM

Hi Arthur! This is the first time I'm using this form, thanks to Nette's contest; the inspiration is a picture of a flower posted on her contest rules. It has already inspired several worthy writes! // paul