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Poem In Paradise

Lush green orange trees laden with ripened fruit that has prolonged its stay late into spring. She sits elegantly on her favourite carved stone bench with an old book to keep her company. The day is calm and warm. Her mind drifts and strays fluttering on velvet wings. Intoxicated by the smell of clustered orange blossoms her thoughts waft across the air evolving into pleasant dreams betrayed by a fleeting smile that’s lost in time. [A poem inspired by the painting: "In the Orangery" by Charles Edward Perugini.] ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 18th July 2014 Contest: A Poem in Paradise Sponsor: Isaiah Zerbst Placing: 1st

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/29/2014 12:11:00 PM

Congratulations, Paul.... XOX..PD

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 4:40:00 PM

Today you have been like morning dew, settling down and leaving a glimmer on several of my poems:) Thank you:) // paul

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 7/25/2014 3:09:00 PM

Beautiful rendition of the picture prompt. I am not familiar with that artist or the painting, but you have painted with word a nice accompaniment. Congratulations on the wise use of your talent with words.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/25/2014 3:18:00 PM

So glad Reason that you find this poem to your liking. Thank you for the positive and encouraging comments...much appreciated. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/23/2014 10:40:00 AM

BIG CONGRATULATIONS DEARIE PAUL!! :D weeee i have never tasted watermelon with ice cream in it.. :D nice..!!!!!! bring it on!!! :D :P

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:56:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi:) I said we can celebrate together...hope the ice-cream has not already started to melt! Will catch up with you later:) // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/23/2014 7:57:00 AM

A lovely poem , a lovely tree my friend. BIG congrats on your fine win!!!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:52:00 AM

Hi Robert! Thanks for the congrats. Tried to make an orange, initially, but it was too oval, so I opted for a tree instead! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/23/2014 7:57:00 AM

You shouldn't be hard on yourself, this was a perfect entry. Congratulations.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:46:00 AM

Thank you Richard. It only takes me minutes to write a poem, but after that I sit down re-reading it many times, and won't post it unless I am satisfied....yes, I am a harsh self-critic! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 7/23/2014 7:56:00 AM

Loved it first time I read it congratulations Paul. Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:39:00 AM

Thank you for returning with winning wishes, Jan. Your paradise lost is a lovely write, too. Hugs. /x/ paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/23/2014 7:25:00 AM

Big congratulations to you Paul for another well-deserved TOP win. You just have the gift, my friend! Warmest regards!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:33:00 AM

Thank you Pandita! You are very kind. You too finished on the winning podium, obtaining not just a little piece of paradise, but much more!! well done:) /x/ paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/23/2014 6:04:00 AM

Im so happy for you! I knew this one would be chosen as a winner. BG

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:25:00 AM

Yes, Barbara, you had faith in it, and I do appreciate that no end! Pleased to be standing next to you on the same podium! // paul

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/23/2014 5:57:00 AM

Painted with pen so vividly I feel as tho I am standing there looking at her!! .. Congrats on a great win my friend! Hugs.. Arlene

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:22:00 AM

Thank you for the wishes and lovely comments, Arlene! Your garden of memories covered itself in glory, too! // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/23/2014 5:14:00 AM

And back again with congrats n white lillies my friend,, Perfect win for an amazing write Paul ! Sponsor n the judges hv really kept my faith in this poetic marvel alive !

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 10:18:00 AM

Wow! Thank you Upma; not many women have given me flowers in life! I do so much appreciate your comments and faith in this poem...and your continuous support:) // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/21/2014 8:15:00 PM

An excellent description that could easily fit the picture given. Loved this part especially my friend.. " Intoxicated by the smell of clustered orange blossoms her thoughts waft across the air evolving into pleasant dreams betrayed by a fleeting smile that’s lost in time." Good luck in the contest and this is a great write my friend!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/22/2014 1:23:00 AM

Many thanks, Robert. Glad you like it. That part of the poem which you quoted is my favourite as well! cu around my friend. // paul

Judy Konos

Date: 7/21/2014 5:02:00 PM

Excellent Paul....she would have chosen Mr. Bingley for certain...I enjoyed and good luck in the contest reads like a winner to me...

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2014 6:02:00 PM

Thank you, Judy. Miss Elizabeth stole the limelight in your original write! // paul

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/20/2014 8:23:00 PM

An exquisite scene of " Day Dream " Paul. The integrity of your vision keeps the senses at attention. Betrayal can be devastating, wicked, but we must be mindful of not allowing our delusions to accuse others of betrayal. J.A.B.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2014 4:34:00 PM

Thank you Justin; your visit and meaningful comments are much appreciated. I look forward to feedback...and I'm always keen to listen! // paul

Hija De La Luna

Date: 7/20/2014 2:09:00 AM

it is very descriptive, Paul! i love this.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/20/2014 4:54:00 AM

Thank you Hija! I'm glad you like this one. Will be stopping by to read more of your work. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/19/2014 11:47:00 AM

I really like this one..I could get into the poem and picture with your unique descriptive lines..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 12:11:00 PM

Thank you for liking the poem and commenting, Sara. Unfortunately, what we picture in our minds while reading often turns out to be different from the original. Nearly always happens to me when I read a book and then watch the film based on it! // paul

Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/19/2014 11:53:00 AM

Looked it up..It was not as I pictured but a very good art work..Sara

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/19/2014 8:10:00 AM

You used a brush instead of a pen with this one Paul, you have painted a scene of serenity...should place well

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 8:51:00 AM

Thank you Frederic. Glad you feel serenity flowing through this write; that's the main ingredient that this picture is based on. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/19/2014 4:55:00 AM

This is paradise-Makes me wanna be there,on that carved stone bench just in the silent serenity of heaven.You really captured the lady in the painting in a beautiful way.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 5:32:00 AM

Now isn't that strange, my Charmileen turning up to comment at the same time, in the space of a minute!:) Thank you Charm for reading and enjoying. I welcome your visits, anytime. // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/19/2014 4:44:00 AM

Beautiful and dreamy. You've captured the heart of the painting.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 5:25:00 AM

Hi Eileen! Thank you for your favourable comments; I did my best, though I feel I could have done better. But that's me...I'm hard on myself. // paul

Robert Nehls

Date: 7/19/2014 3:43:00 AM

Very well written, Paul. I love the imagery in this one. How thoughts can drift away and blend with nature's surroundings. This is so true, my friend, and you have penned it wonderfully.... Robert.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 5:20:00 AM

Thank you Robert; I do so much appreciate your positive feedback. Glad you like it. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/19/2014 3:12:00 AM

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 4:54:00 AM

Thank you for the faith you show in this poem, and for the high rating, Upma! You are such a positive source of encouragement! You are a true friend:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/19/2014 3:08:00 AM

Absolute beauty is this write Paul! perfect imagination capturing mood,, extremely emotive,, GL in contest ! surely a winner mark my words//upma//

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 7/19/2014 3:09:00 AM

A top 7 !!

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/18/2014 8:31:00 PM

Lovely, just lovely. Im struggling with this one. you are giving me inspiration! BG

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 4:25:00 AM

Thank you Barbara! I'm glad that you have found it inspiring:) Hope you'll come up with a winner! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/18/2014 7:57:00 PM

nicely done Paul.. :) the imagery is great.. :)! i like the line fluttering in velvet wings.. :D so busy this Friday Paul... but am happy and tired.. :D!!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 4:14:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi:) I think that today even you are fluttering on velvet wings!! Have a nice Friday filled with song within your heart. God bless you:) // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/18/2014 7:55:00 PM

Well done Paul, I hope that picture has inspired a winner, :)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 4:09:00 AM

Thank you Casarah! The picture is inspiring, but there is the danger that we repeat the same thoughts; not easy to reach out for something totally different. // paul

David Mohn

Date: 7/18/2014 7:43:00 PM

Love the imagery and the wispy flow on this Paul...thanks for the comment on my acrostic

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2014 4:06:00 AM

Thank you David; glad you enjoyed it. I enjoy your writes too; wish I had time to visit more frequently. // paul