Plastic

moon river thins out crawling on muddy waters …like black honey thick with phlegm grandeur of tides breaks her frail song choking for breath… sea creatures huff for clear wafts life is shortened now bearing trash of man’s neglect… to nurture pure ocean beds crests wither with age a garbage of waves fleeting … swallowed by lethal plastic © sedoka---5/7/7/, 5/7/7 ''' ''' '' ' Susan Burch’s Paper or Plastic

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Christopher Bunton

Date: 3/6/2012 6:44:00 PM

Congratulations!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 3/3/2012 6:15:00 AM

Congratulations nette a very nice piece makes you think xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/2/2012 7:16:00 PM

NETTE... congratulations! WITH YOUR CONTEST WIN!! *Enjoyed stopping by to view may winners tonight!! Have yourself a very nice night ;-)*always..pd

Samual Ronthorpe

Date: 3/2/2012 5:09:00 PM

Nette, wonderful words, wonderful form. well done. Congrats on making Susan's winners' list.....................S.Ronthorpe

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 3/2/2012 2:58:00 PM

Congratulations on your win and thanks for supporting my contest! a surprisingly dark poem from you ;) great subject.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/2/2012 11:04:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Susan's "Paper Or Plastic" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Dinda Minardi

Date: 3/2/2012 7:59:00 AM

I love how turn this theme into a poetic piece, Nette. Glad I red this :)

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/2/2012 7:47:00 AM

beautiful imagery with a sad but very true message. nice one!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/18/2012 8:31:00 AM

Nette luv u certainly said ..or wrote.. a mouthful of ,agnificent marvelous phrases .. this form, has bee n lingering for me to do a contest and now contemplating.. thankxxx.. good luck.. a sure shot winning wonder ..sweets..

Jancarl Campi

Date: 2/18/2012 12:01:00 AM

what a great poem. i hope those who read your work got your message. Time to turn out turn light here and thanks for reading my work, Jancarl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/17/2012 9:36:00 PM

well, I can sure see what you think of plastic. You took a very inventive approach and came up with a powerful message for the environment as well. I'm just going off for the day. I just can't take it anymore. hahaha. Luv ya, Andrea

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/17/2012 5:42:00 PM

The third line is very expressive of what happens to rivers which are being polluted ..Very graffic detail..Good luck in the contest..Reads like a winner to me..This is one of your best..Thanks for the kind review of my work..I appreciate the encouraging review of my Haiku..Sara

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/17/2012 3:30:00 PM

So true nette, awesome example to humankind, is this wonderful poem. harry

Cindy Lu

Date: 2/17/2012 12:24:00 PM

paper. you have to ask for paper in the grocery store. very good writing. Thanks so much for commenting on my poetry, it was the light part of my day. Sincerely, Cindy Lu

Russell Sivey

Date: 2/17/2012 11:52:00 AM

Yes, it is truly awful what we are doing to our environment, especially the water, by using plastic! Plastic is not really bio-degradable and causes a lot of problems in the streams and rivers like you said! I hate to see this happen to our planet! This is a great write my friend! Excellent Work!!

Kash Poet

Date: 2/17/2012 11:36:00 AM

Very good approach to the contest theme Nette.Best wishes.

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/17/2012 11:31:00 AM

You have described land and water pollution very well with these sedoka entries. Good write Nette.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/17/2012 10:59:00 AM

Well done, good luck in contest nette! - oxox love Anne-Lise