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Picture Perfect

FATE DOES NOT FORGET


She cherished him long after nights had crept
Tracing his shape on byways, on footfalls
Like dangle of lint she could not forget;
Breezes waved a quick adieu, winter drawled
Amidst the rancid trees bared, and yet
Her faraway lover tracked her stroll.
Entranced, they climbed into each other’s eyes
Prompting the moon to act as fate’s ally.



Contest: Picture Perfect, Andrea Dietrich

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Tim Ryerson

Date: 8/25/2013 3:18:00 AM

'They climbed into each other's eyes'...My God Nette, how did you come up with THAT? Stunning...

Donna Jones

Date: 8/24/2013 6:24:00 PM

Nette....loved the climbing into each others eyes...lovely poem....congratulations

Skat A

Date: 8/22/2013 9:06:00 PM

CONGRATULATIONS NETTE.... Picture awesome Perfect. LOVE ~SKAT~

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/22/2013 8:04:00 PM

amazing it is Nette... congrats...PD

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/22/2013 3:12:00 PM

Nette, this is a gorgeous poem. I was not sure about a few of your end rhymes, but for grammar, punctuation, and imagery, you were spot on!! Congrats for your win!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/22/2013 12:15:00 PM

This will not soon be forgotten. Congratulations Nette.

Richard D Seal

Date: 8/16/2013 6:24:00 PM

Hi Nette, a perfect picture you've written here, I imagine them waist deep in snow for some reason lol, good luck in the contest. Take care, Richard

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/13/2013 10:37:00 AM

Hi dear Nette..How happy i am..I might call online on sunday on drake s show..I definitely would hear you : ) Now re this beauty..It touches me deep to core..for many reasons

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/13/2013 8:39:00 AM

Your poems cannot be anything but perfect........in every way, every time I read one.....I find perfection and beauty!

Bl Devnath

Date: 8/12/2013 10:16:00 AM

How a loving poem can be penned, I try to learn from you. You have shown an excellent way to depict the matter of two hearts. Genius........, loved always, bl

Poet Tacito

Date: 8/12/2013 8:43:00 AM

Indeed, Fate does not forget. Fate is Karma's best friend, after all...this was a very gripping piece.

Christine Phillips

Date: 8/12/2013 8:35:00 AM

"Entranced, they climbed into each other’s eyes" Very beautiful line. Nice poem.

S. Nadia Azam Shah Bukhari

Date: 8/12/2013 7:51:00 AM

Beautiful work. best wishes from your new friend Nadia. Good luck.

Dalila Agtani

Date: 8/11/2013 11:07:00 PM

What a dreamy poem nette. I enjoyed this tonight...I was thinking Fate or Faith are both acceptable title. Oh, BTW..I am a Virgo, born in the year of the dragon. I am married to a Scorpion..what do you think? Dragon vs a Scorpion, who is at the losing end? LOL Love, Dalila

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/11/2013 10:19:00 PM

I got a great visual of this wonderful write my friend! I imagined these two so very in love under the full moon entranced with each other, just as you have written, I can imagine it! Sorry I haven't been around the past couple of days, my grandmother died on Friday, it is so sad, she had emphysema so bad she just lost her breath and passed away by the struggle to just breath! I really enjoyed reading this awesome poem this evening! What a delightful piece, Great Work!!

Len Gasun

Date: 8/11/2013 5:37:00 PM

Good morning my dear friend Nette! Big hugs! How are you? I hope everything is going well with you and the rest there. I was quite agitated since last night when I heard from my friends that there's a typhoon there. I hope it's not destructive. Stay safe ok? Here in BKK, it's cloudy. About your poem, it's so lovely, sweet & romantic. I love it and embracing it this morning. You write outstanding poems as always! Thank you so much for sharing & everything. Take care! love lots, Leonora

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 8/11/2013 3:39:00 PM

Very tenderly sweet. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/11/2013 1:18:00 PM

Romantic work penned..Enjoyed reading this one today...Thanks for the visits to my work...Sara

Kash Poet

Date: 8/11/2013 1:10:00 PM

Beautiful as usual!!Love it Nette!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/11/2013 4:49:00 AM

- Nette, this poem is just beautiful! - Have a nice Sunday! - (I have come home to Norway now .... long journey home ... tired and exhausted ... have not managed to read poem) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)