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Picked Clean

Picked Clean I've talked about the weather, I've talked about true love. I wrote about the locust trees And the painted sky above. I've touched upon the songbirds, And river's serene flow, And wonders of the twilight hour And the moon's mystical glow. I've brushed on urgent topics, The news in alternate view Of tyranny in government And distress of the red, white, and blue. I've written of raging battles Between the good and bad And spiritual forces in high places That drives this nation mad. I've written praise and worship songs That gives the Lord God praise While feeling quite abandoned Through many darkened days. I've disclosed some private thoughts That burdened my own mind; I've often written words on death The only peace I find. Today I struggle once again On this rainy, cloudy day With pen poised to the paper lines To find just what to say. I celebrate the freedom To write the words I please As another Memorial Day passes by With a dank and fickle breeze. And kind of like the vulture does I've picked the carcass clean, I've ripped the flesh exposing bone With nothing left between. The blood of words has formed a puddle And quickly dried to black, And if I linger in the road I'll be the vulture's snack. May 29, 2013

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Date: 6/23/2013 3:23:00 PM
I can certainly relate to your great expression of the inability to surface thoughts and still longing to write more. Great creativity and theme. :)
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/23/2013 5:08:00 PM
Thank you, Karen!
Date: 6/10/2013 8:58:00 PM
Hi Holly, a very cool and fascinating first poem on the soup.... This hear my friend is a sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/11/2013 3:31:00 AM
Thank you, SKAT, for welcoming me to Poetry Soup. And thank you for stopping by and reading my poem. I enjoy reading poems on this site and hope to add more of my own poems. I will stroll over to your page and read some of yours as well. Thank you, again!
Date: 6/4/2013 10:45:00 AM
Holly, a enjoyable poem to read. - Welcome to P-Soup-Hope you will get much pleasure from sharing your poems here with us. - Have fun with poetry! - Welcome to read some of my poems. - Have a nice week. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/11/2013 3:33:00 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise, and I will check some of yours out as well.
Date: 6/4/2013 10:11:00 AM
wow Holly, that sure is cleaning a plate.. strong and meaningful ending. Dropping in with a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. My name is Linda; and I’m from the humid state of Texas. I’m here to invite you on over to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* please consider my contest* hopefully I can be one of your first poetry soup friends. If you ever need or want honest feedback on a certain poem let me know. Do not hesitate on clicking my name when you spot it on the soup. I look forward in following you and your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community; we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Always * Linda
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/11/2013 3:36:00 AM
Hi Linda, Thanks for your warm welcome. I will check your contests out to see if I can enter any of my poems. It's worth a shot, I guess. Nothing ventured, nothing gained. Catch you later--
Date: 6/3/2013 7:06:00 PM
What a fine debut on the Soup!! Welcome talented friend. Your talent is easily recognized in this magnificent work. I look forward to more of your posts.... Jake
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/4/2013 3:50:00 AM
Thank you, Jake, for taking the time to stop by and read and review my poem.
Date: 6/3/2013 4:07:00 PM
Ideas just come. look at the minutia of things need be and try role reversal for levity. maybe you can snack on the vulture!
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/4/2013 3:48:00 AM
Yes, you are so right, thank you.
Date: 6/3/2013 9:52:00 AM
Magnificent & strong ending. Very, very hard hitting. I will be nobody's snack. Just sayin'. :) Excellent work!
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/4/2013 3:48:00 AM
Thanks, Drake, for reviewing this poem.
Date: 6/3/2013 8:26:00 AM
WOW.. what a brilliant and well penned poets demise you have captured. So true... we eventually run out of the 'usual' topics, only to find a new one emerge-- like this one. Welcome to P/Soup
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Holly Smith
Date: 6/4/2013 3:47:00 AM
Thank you, Kim, for your kind review of this poem!

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