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Penetrating Portals

Your eyes arrive on me like the whips of passion's urgency wide with white smite encasing eons inflamed in irises, I feel the tight temperature of they're heated hue, my lust crises rises, brown autumn burning into ravenous red, seduction's takeover fast overhead, you've got an angel in one eye, a devil in the other, teammates, temptation led trouble in your stare and glory in your glare, there's a gamble on your lips I get an adrenaline hit, I see the misfit, magic in those lids beauty and banditry bound to fantasy, hips and slits favoring me, brash brows and lapping lashes portals pivoting on our cunning chances, flawless in flirt, a merciless miracle of attraction, there's somethin lawless in you woman got me comin for your lovin - J.A.B.

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Quincy Mac

Date: 5/8/2016 6:20:00 AM

Nice piece of writing Justin 7/7

Justin Bordner
Date: 5/8/2016 7:07:00 PM

A woman, and passion, that reveals a new way for a man to hunger and bleed Quincy. That's how I wrote this poem...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/6/2016 6:56:00 AM

and....again.

Justin Bordner
Date: 3/7/2016 9:18:00 PM

And again there be no end to what our eyes hotly send Eileen...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/5/2015 2:18:00 PM

Had to read one of your passionate pieces tonight. This is simply beautiful, Justin. Eyes can so so much that words cannot....hugs

Justin Bordner
Date: 11/6/2015 2:41:00 AM

Your eyes hold secrets I crave...my passion responds to your needs Eileen...J.A.B.

Jay Loveless

Date: 11/5/2014 11:42:00 AM

That line, an angel in one eye a devil in the other. Perfect fit for me. This iz an awesome write. I love it

Justin Bordner
Date: 11/5/2014 8:29:00 PM

It truly is Jay...wings and horns...claws and kisses...love and rage...beauty and sadness...its good to feel your excitement Jay...J.A.B.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/3/2014 5:04:00 AM

This poem describes the one so well..Through her eyes one can see both sweet innocence ,and ardent passion...Must be She with all her muses playing with your heart.This is sweet and sensual too.Once I ve written a poem called 'Daughter of God,lover of the devil.'.then erased it..Dont even know why..But it is true Guess We all have devils and angels playing with our heart.Of course I prefer sweetness to sensuality if I had to have my pick,but it seems We are molded from both God and Eve (or as many say adam. : ). I love the thoughts I could sense through yr words.I love 'the gamble of her lips'..Btw,thanks for your supportive comments Justin.

Justin Bordner
Date: 11/3/2014 9:08:00 PM

Your soul travels the spectrum of sensuality and motivations with remarkable discernment Charma. You are a patient romantic, selective in sweetness, confident in your wisdom. We play love like warriors gamble with fate, its so beautiful Charma...J.A.B.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/2/2014 10:59:00 PM

A charismatic caress to the ears Justin, leaving tingles!

Justin Bordner
Date: 11/3/2014 2:18:00 AM

The ears have very sensitive parts Connie, tingles that begin in the eyes and ears reach our desires with a rampage of hunger...J.A.B.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/31/2014 1:26:00 AM

There is something so magnetic and mysterious about a person's eyes that just draws us in... I loved the line, "an angel in one eye, a devil in the other." I think that everyone has a bit of both in them, some people are just better at hiding it... I really enjoyed this amazing write, Justin. Very intense and soulful, as always!

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/31/2014 3:03:00 AM

To have soul focus concentrated on us via the eyes grasps the very heart Kelly, you are so correct! An angel supporting our needs, a devil stressing our naughty wants. It feels good to share intensity with you Kelly...J.A.B.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/29/2014 7:12:00 PM

visceral and utterly appealing as you take me to a poetic ride feasting on imagery almost surreal yet divine, Justin.. take it away, wow!.. huggs

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/30/2014 12:48:00 PM

The power of eyes infiltrates the currents of our interior rivers, seeking and raiding into the soul Nette. Yes, sometimes passion need be sureal to optimize magic. so glad you feel the attraction Nette...J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/27/2014 7:50:00 PM

The eyes open up portals of passion, truth and pain that would otherwise be wordless.I think one can read years just by looking someone in the eye. They are sensitive and can be bewitching, intimidating and heartbreaking. My favorite line from your poem: "you've got an angel in one eye, a devil in the other, teammates, temptation led". You've got the angel and the devil in this work, rich in the magic of temptation. Soulful work here. My eyes are always out for more! Always, Laura

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/27/2014 7:58:00 PM

I love being the focus of your Eye Laura, you always teach me about the exquisite balance between suffering, joy and love. Heartbreaking eyes, so much expressed with so few words, so much told with one glance. Thank you for the powerful comment my dear Laura. Your work is a portal to amazing soul. J.A.B.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/27/2014 3:59:00 PM

Some cool lines in this one, like the ending comin' for your lovin. SWEET. I love the idea of the eyes as portals. Portals to the everlasting soul. I love eyes and poems about them. Sexy one!

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/27/2014 7:32:00 PM

Soul is very arousing Andrea...your portals surely sparkle wild...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/27/2014 1:05:00 PM

I like the last two lines of this poem..... Something lawless. .... beautiful. .... That last line a clever play on the release that love brings. Very sensual. You are the Prince of Passion The title is superb. Penetrating Portals..... only the brave can reach inner sanctums... lovely write

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/27/2014 3:19:00 PM

Her eyes communicate enchantment beyond the expected, she has the power to open the primal need of a man Jade. A woman using the instinct of her magic with disregard for law, she summons and he responds. Your beauty knows this truth. Your view moves me Jade...J.A.B.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/27/2014 9:57:00 AM

That's all good Justin I still sing your praises, you have an uncommon talent.

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/27/2014 12:01:00 PM

Thank you Richard...I am who I need to be, a savsge angel with style and soul my own, proud and grateful to Providence that I can honor my inspirations. J.A.B.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/27/2014 2:23:00 AM

There's a lot of killer lines in the middle of the poem... trouble in your stare, glory in your glare, beauty and banditry bound to fantasy. Catchy, alliterative, and descriptions that just come off the page. I can see what Richard is saying about that last line - but I can see your point of view too. If it's what YOU as the author felt at the time and you still feel it - then that's what really counts. You'll never please each and every reader, but that isn't the goal.

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/27/2014 12:07:00 PM

I concur with your perspective of what an Artist's objective should be Timothy. I translate my inspiration to the best of my ability, with a rare passion and reverence for the language I command. I seek not acceptance, only the truth of my passion. Thank you for the comprehensive comment, glad you respect my spirit Timothy. J.A.B.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/27/2014 2:24:00 AM

If you moved but a single person with your poetry, at some point in time. Then what else can one ask? Love you writing style, my friend.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/26/2014 5:28:00 PM

I love the whole piece but pardon me the last line doesn't match the artistry of the piece. You may see it differently but it brings to mind the character "Mclovin" where the rest of the poem was more the Prince of Passion.

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/26/2014 8:10:00 PM

I know not who or what "Mclovin" is Richard, regardless it is not uncommon for unorthodox soul and artistry to be perplexing, in fact there is strength and beauty in such vistas. I disagree with you Richard, but your honesty is appreciated, and I'm happy that my passion inspires you. J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/26/2014 2:15:00 PM

There is so much passion in this piece....It is simply sizzling off the screen. "Your eyes arrive on me like whips of passion's urgency." Very real..."My lust crises rises". Justin, you are a very astounding poet, indeed. Passion is your passion.

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/26/2014 2:21:00 PM

There is an inherent gamble in every movement of passion, the eyes of the ones we love possess instinct to entice, a drive to claim. Your name is beautiful, like emeralds in the fabric of night's mystery Jade...J.A.B.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/26/2014 9:12:00 AM

Wow, this is an excellent write Justin.

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/26/2014 2:22:00 PM

Her eyes are beyond excellent, they are extravagant in eros Maurice. J.A.B.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 10/26/2014 9:06:00 AM

New write Justin enjoyed. Strong in voice and well done in theme and illicit passion... Enjoyed... Sending you a smile, Verlena

Justin Bordner
Date: 10/26/2014 2:28:00 PM

Thank you Verlena...you are aware of the sacred facets my friend. Excited to read more of your fine work. J.A.B.