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Peeling the Dark

.............iiiiiiiii................. strewn on the laboring dark much too quenched by the very ink of a smothering wind, her layered cry out-thumps a mortal bid of wretched reels defining some plea of farewell, “ go and leave me to dwindle in the dust; save yourself if you must!”… her vanishing beads of rosary melt on the salt of a thunder groan withering among phantoms of shapeless, unknown sands now so ravaged by the stark black of a night disheveled by hairs of fear and rotting despair. it is said that a flicker of moon throbbing inside her reached out , extracting this sliver of light to glimmer among her inner veins, that for some blessed hint of phoenix rising she clasps that golden orb whirling on a dot of flame, as if to whisper,” claim me in your hands and release this golden ray.. let it touch his head, across the blind drifts of vapors cast by Laverna's spell. be the one.. be one to bridge the light.” as blankness looms between curtains of time tipsy, her knees figure in a sway limping yet running in a daze beyond a dimensionless pace opening a gateway that zooms glittering spins unto his cinder-ash head… and his power flashes a might of bolt piercing the blank gloom of doom, an exuberant eternal dawn burns where life forms arise. ................................................ *Laverna--- Roman Goddess of the Underworld (( for Matt Caliri’s “ Finish the Dream “ Contest ))

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Date: 2/25/2011 11:26:00 AM
its just not fair ! ! ....the only reason you win is because you are more talented in every way than me.........I've tried money and threats and flattery ..... but they dont work...........( I will try pity now...)...will you PLEASE allow me to win sometimes Nette? ...affectionately........Syd
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Date: 2/25/2011 7:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Nette in Matt's contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/24/2011 6:52:00 AM
Congrats Nette my friend on your big win in Finish the Dream contest.. super cool luv.. just posted my new blog ..hope u will check it out luv.. explains a lot..
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Date: 2/23/2011 10:13:00 PM
Great writing. Congratulations on winning in Matt's contest with this entry.
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Date: 2/23/2011 7:52:00 PM
Beautiful use of imagery and mythology.many congratulations for this win.
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Date: 2/23/2011 6:04:00 PM
Congratulations on your win~~
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Date: 2/23/2011 4:55:00 PM
A great job Nette on your worthy poem's near the top honor. Congratulations on your fifth place .Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/23/2011 4:03:00 PM
Mesmerizing! Nette. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie
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Date: 2/23/2011 1:09:00 PM
You go gal...a "charged" write electric, a stand alone verse. Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 2/23/2011 12:01:00 PM
Congratulations onn the fifth place win in the contest of John, nette
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Date: 2/23/2011 10:14:00 AM
Awesome, Nette. Congratulations on your deserving win the Matt's contest! Love, Annalise
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Date: 2/23/2011 9:57:00 AM
Great writing Nette. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/12/2011 11:21:00 AM
OOps, I just posted something mistaking names, so let me start again! LIke Kash says here, this is amazing imagination, as always, Nette. I know that Matt is going to eat it up!! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 2/11/2011 10:32:00 AM
Amazing your imagination nette.Wonderful write!-kashinath
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Date: 2/11/2011 6:11:00 AM
Spectacular write Nette my friend and a powerful finish the dream sequence luv.. Matt is particular but this one WILL catch his eye my friend... enjoyed with luv.. that ink of smothering wind... awesome ..
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Date: 2/10/2011 3:28:00 PM
Good luck in the contest with this creative work..Thanks for your kind review of my work..Sara
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Date: 2/10/2011 1:47:00 PM
just wonderful. full of vivid imagination, I love it, best of luck in the contest~~
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Date: 2/10/2011 11:21:00 AM
Always such amazing imagery from your poetry, Nette! This is a superb write for the contest and I hope to see it in the winners' circle. You certainly found inspiration in this contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/10/2011 10:08:00 AM
"curtains of time tipsy" "gloom of doom"( a resemblance with Shakespeare ) I like it all but especially these phrases, which will soon appear ( unacknowledged) in my doggerel LOL....you're a fascinating poet, Nette....best wishes for the contest..... Syd
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