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I am the most regal bird you’ll ever see in the land With my spectacular plumage, I’m pompous and grand My mate is quite dowdy as all her feathers are brown But we have royal connections as we both wear a crown! Did you know that my tail feathers are known as a train Of course I need no encouragement to show it off again! My train’s got over fifty ocelli which means simple eyes and when I fly high into the sky folk look up in surprise I’m one of the largest flying birds ever known to man With my enormous tail I’ve got a five foot wingspan Yes, I’m a proud peacock and it’s no wonder folk stare when I strut round palace gardens with my tail in the air I ignore all other birds, they think I’m nasty and snide - so an apt noun for us peacocks is an ostentation or pride! I am a Bird - Personification Poetry Contest Sponsored by Tania Kitchin 07/24/20

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2020 3:37:00 PM

I like that you and I wrote kind of similarly on our birds. So glad this scored a high placement. Congrats , my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 3:55:00 PM

thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrew Crisci

Date: 8/4/2020 11:59:00 AM

Congratulations on your first place, Jan. Your poem is beautuflully and craftly written in a style that's so uniquely yours. I hope you are staying safe and taking care of yourself. The pandemic is spiking in the USA. Young crowds are irresponsible. No asks and no social distancing. This is very scary. I have enjoyed reading your poem about the stunning peacock. Birds are beautful and inspiring. Have a wonderful day with your family. Be well, stay safe and smile. Your Poetry Soup friend, Andrew.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:41:00 PM

thanks Andrew:-) here on our little Island we are covid free over 74 days now, makes me so glad i live here and not in the uK or further afield. stay safe and keep well:-)hugs Jan x

Andrew Crisci
Date: 8/4/2020 12:00:00 PM

typo: no masks

V. Deepa

Date: 8/3/2020 2:39:00 AM

Wonderful write Jan mam:-) Peacock is my favourite bird.It's a national bird of our country India.:-) You've described very beautifully.Congrats on your top win:-)Keep inspiring.Much love:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:43:00 PM

thanks V Deepa:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 8/2/2020 9:24:00 AM

Jan, great descriptive poem and personification. they are a beautiful bird and do walk around like they rule their surroundings. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:43:00 PM

thanks Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Patri Venkata Ramana

Date: 8/2/2020 6:26:00 AM

A beautiful poem. Congrats on your win !

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:43:00 PM

thanks Patri:-) hugs jan xx

Aditi Mishra

Date: 8/2/2020 3:58:00 AM

Such a beautiful personfication of a peacock Jan! Loved the vibrant colours and moods. It is really a rare opportunity to see a peacock dancing with unfurled wings. Congratulations on your win! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:44:00 PM

thanks Aditi:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt

Date: 8/1/2020 10:43:00 PM

Congratulations for your excellent peacock poem, dear Jan! Worthy of #1

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:44:00 PM

thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 8/1/2020 8:47:00 PM

A pleasure to read ~ congrats on your top win. I did not know peacocks were able to fly!!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:45:00 PM

thanks Line, yes the pesky birds fly into our friend's garden and cause havoc:-( hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 8/1/2020 8:46:00 PM

Gorgeous. Majestic. I love Peacock. Big Congrats to win Top

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:45:00 PM

thanks Anisha:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Schneiter

Date: 8/1/2020 7:55:00 PM

Jan, this poem is as magnificent as the peacock's plumage. That is, of course, no surprise--premium-quality excellence is your hallmark in poem after poem after poem. Your talent is astonishing. Hugs, Paul

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:46:00 PM

aww you are such a sweetheart thanks for dropping by Paul:-) hugs Jan x

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/1/2020 2:38:00 PM

Jan, this is a fabulous, vividly descriptive, delightful, WINNING poem! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:47:00 PM

thanks Janice:-) hugs jan xx

Robert L. Hinshaw

Date: 8/1/2020 1:10:00 PM

Congrats for your well-deserved win! I'm honored to share lst place with you - Bob

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:47:00 PM

thanks Bob:-) hugs jan xx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 8/1/2020 12:35:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your first place win with your wonderful personification poem, peacocks do seem pompous! :) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:48:00 PM

thanks Tania:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt

Date: 7/30/2020 11:28:00 AM

Love the treatment of the beautiful peacock and his ostentatious attitude towards others. Makes a good metaphor for some humans, methinks. Well done, this should be a winner. Hugs ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2020 12:48:00 PM

Yeah Ive met a few peacocks on here:-( hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 7/28/2020 3:14:00 PM

I did not know they could fly... I have learned so much from this inspiring piece. Good work.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/28/2020 3:22:00 PM

oh yes they can fly as they come into our friend's garden and wreak havoc:-( hugs jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 7/27/2020 5:26:00 AM

Absolutely amazing Jan!! great job!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 2:00:00 PM

Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/26/2020 4:52:00 PM

Lovely written -- and so informative too, in such a palatable way!! G.L. in the contest, Jan! :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2020 4:58:00 PM

thanks so much GW:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/26/2020 1:02:00 PM

You are a fancy schmancy, cocky bird; I am assuming you are a male peacock.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2020 1:12:00 PM

Yes a peacock is male a peahen is female:-) hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/26/2020 11:06:00 AM

You certainly chose a magnificent bird, Jan, and described the peacock perfectly. There's a bird park in S. Florida where you can see many of them, but I never did see one flying. Imagine that! An excellent entry for the contest, Hon. Wishing you success. Hugs, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2020 12:58:00 PM

You wouldn't expect such a huge bird to take to the air - my friend's wish they couldn't fly as they cause havoc in their garden - their neighbour had 5 adults and of course over the years they have bred - last brood was 5 chicks:-( hugs jan xx

Jack Horne

Date: 7/26/2020 11:03:00 AM

love this fun piece - makes me think of a cartoon I once saw, where there's a peacock strutting before a peahen & she says, 'Cut the crap & show me your dick.' LOL

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2020 12:55:00 PM

OMG that's hilarious!:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/25/2020 6:07:00 PM

This should be the official bird of the White House. This is a fun one Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2020 12:55:00 PM

ha ha ha the orange ommpah loompah certainly struts like a peacock lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/25/2020 3:17:00 PM

Well thought and done, Jan! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2020 12:54:00 PM

Thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/25/2020 1:25:00 PM

- So beautifully described, Jan - A greeting to the Royal Family Allison :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2020 2:06:00 PM

Lol I am far from royal unless you count my queen of poop crown lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/24/2020 10:10:00 PM

Beautifully said, Jan, I wrote on White Peacock:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2020 2:05:00 PM

I will go and read it now Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/24/2020 5:18:00 PM

G'day Jan ... a very good personification Jan. One glitch with male peacocks is if two live at each end of town, their calling to each other drives people mad - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2020 2:01:00 PM

They are the bane of our friends lives:-( Hugs Jan xx