Pampas Grass

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pampas grass stirs whirls dances... tinkling sound dog hugs,

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/26/2012 5:43:00 PM

Hi Sara yes traditional haiku is about nature but the verse Sucker was mean to be an example of western/ comtemporary/ modern haiku which does not have to be about nature and can include man..I prefer the traditional form. Your haiku, though about nature, still qualifies as western etc. because you used personification & punctuation though ..I am not sure what dogs hugs refers to? or why a comma was necessary? Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 3/26/2012 6:21:00 PM

LOL I thought maybe it was a new trend? Hey it's only a comma hal;f the time I have on two differnt shoes! [I have two pairs of the same same shoes one brown & one black!]

Jack Horne

Date: 3/26/2012 8:39:00 AM

I think I've read all your new poems now, so I thought I'd enjoy this one again - it reminds me of walks with my gran : )

Joann Grisetti

Date: 3/23/2012 1:16:00 PM

Lovely image of the grass dancing. thank you for sharing this haiku.

Jack Horne

Date: 3/23/2012 11:22:00 AM

love the mental picture I get from this one, Sara : )