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Pain Drips

It seems at times we play sad parts. Dancing on the edge of obscurity. Music played on broken harps. One step away from insanity. We cling with a fervored grip. How we hold on is a mystery. We try not to drink yet take a sip. The flavor of remorse intoxicates. From our minds the liquid drips. The judge and jury exonerates. They cry this guilt was never yours Still this knowledge doesn't satiate. For the demons aren't trapped behind locked doors Their power is infused within our pores For Freddie's Terza Rima contest.

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Red Fiery

Date: 8/16/2013 11:10:00 PM

Once again I feel connected. Judge and jury...exonerates. ...brought tears again ...keep on writing like this. You have a big fan here...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/17/2013 6:56:00 AM

Thanks Red, I appreciate you looking back through my work.

Karen Anglesey

Date: 8/11/2013 5:15:00 PM

WOW..I really, really like this one. You took the subject full throttle. Excellent write and congratulations on your win:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/11/2013 6:21:00 PM

What a great response Karen!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/11/2013 2:14:00 PM

Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/11/2013 6:22:00 PM

Thanks Sara

Len Gasun

Date: 8/10/2013 10:33:00 PM

Good morning my dear friend Richard! This is a very lovely & touching write. A perfect terza rima indeed. I haven't tried this form yet but you did it extraordinarily well. I'm loving it & goes to my fave. Thank you so much for sharing and my win in your contest. I'm so sorry if the expression of gratitude comes only now 'cuz I didn't have enough time to come back @ soup. Got hectic schedules. But now I can stay longer 'til tom. (holiday). God bless! Million thanks! love lots & hugs, Leonora

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/11/2013 6:25:00 PM

Thanks Leonora. Your win in my contest was well deserved, I appreciate the entry in my contest.

Skat A

Date: 8/9/2013 7:08:00 PM

well done... SKAT

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/9/2013 7:20:00 PM

Thanks SKAT

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/9/2013 4:47:00 PM

wow, what a great poem about remorse and sadness, Richard. I really like it. Congrats, and I'm glad I am finally seeing it.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/9/2013 6:37:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I had forgotten I wrote this one.

Richard D Seal

Date: 7/29/2013 5:05:00 PM

You have to live with you do, best to stay on the side of sanity, though I'll admit to slipping over now and then lol. You've made a great job of this write Rick, with a powerful message. Take care, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/29/2013 5:08:00 PM

Thanks Richard, I appreciate your visits today. You definatly have a playful humorous nature, I like that about you.

Milton Toran

Date: 7/23/2013 9:46:00 AM

"We try not to drink yet take a sip". Absolutely my favorite line! We fight so hard to avoid the temptations in life, but that one small sip is all it takes to wreak havoc in our lives. Love the metaphoric contrast to our struggles and choices in life. Milt

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/23/2013 2:56:00 PM

You got it Milt! Sometimes seems pretty hard to resist and we believe we are stong enough to control the outcome. The deceiver has us figured out. Thanks for commenting.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/22/2013 2:19:00 PM

Deep write lined with somber yet appealing tones, rich... wonderful!..:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/22/2013 3:54:00 PM

Thanks Nette

Heather Ober

Date: 7/22/2013 8:14:00 AM

Those last two lines - wow!! Fantastic message and imagery, Rick! I love the title too.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/22/2013 11:47:00 AM

Thanks Heather.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/22/2013 8:07:00 AM

Richard....did you check? Are you sure you've done it the right way? Will you get back to me on this when you can? Thanks

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/22/2013 8:58:00 AM

Thanks....please get back to me when you do..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/22/2013 8:12:00 AM

In the form area it seems that the last stanza should rhyme with the second line of the previous stanza. I sent a note to Craig to get some clarification.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/21/2013 4:20:00 PM

You've outdone yourself..this is magnificent...Another winner. BG

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/21/2013 5:24:00 PM

Thanks Barb, I appreciate the kind visit.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/21/2013 11:24:00 AM

I don't know what to write.....It's too deep for words

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/21/2013 12:41:00 PM

That is more than enough, thanks

Colleen Bono

Date: 7/21/2013 10:55:00 AM

Very deep. I wouldn't know where to start on a poem for your contest. Could you soup mail me a short example and maybe it will kickstart something? Love Colleen

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/21/2013 12:41:00 PM

I will send a soup mail.

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/21/2013 9:36:00 AM

Some very, very deep messages within this piece. "Dancing on the edge of obscurity, Music played on broken harps"...damn.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/22/2013 3:55:00 PM

thanks Drake. I missed you down here. sorry I didn't respnd till now.