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Overtones

Allow me to confess how gratifying it is To see the rainfall of lights permeate through your eyes, Swirling lightening warmth into my own To see your thoughtful lips curve into a summer's beam We energize each other as our words fall like playful spring petals, Expressing our hearts' joys without grievance or complaint But with genuine feeling and mutual delight Fastened tight with love's newfound might Artistic minds mix, dispersing colors others barely fathom Upon the surface of their distracted rights, Their distant autumnal attentions Instead we dream, diligent of and in each other Reflective of a world that snows and blizzards Aware of the audience - the stars - that cry with glee in every climactic scene We rise For the sake of simply touching them Every heart that means to listen To such precious overtones The subtle and soft notes below and above the melody That make magic real, And the darkest souls hopeful I love to just watch you smile, To take in every glimmering feeling As they pass like seasons from dawn to sunset Our feelings change Our tunes build upon the ever growing masterpiece That is our very existence, Our union and our uprising of all that is life I love to trace the silhouette of your grace, To paint sounds and syllables where your eyes will accept them To embrace you with an assuring memory to hold forever We need not worry, For the melody of this beautiful life has long waited For the sustaining and blooming accompaniment That we master, savor, and make better My friend, my life, From dawn to dusk, And every trying night These overtones will resonate our legacy for all time

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 3/28/2016 10:48:00 AM
What could I say that others here haven't already? Astounding emotion. Resounding ending.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/28/2016 9:53:00 PM
Your words mean a lot! Thanks so much for reading this one. You are one of the poets who inspired me to write it, so thanks for being you. (: ~Laura
Date: 3/24/2016 12:00:00 AM
Extraordinary! It's strange to say, since I already love your poetry so much, but I can see you getting better, Laura! You pull me in right away, and I feel privileged to take part in these sentimental feelings with you. Even in the way you started this fine poem left no room for me to turn away. Allow me to add to this favorites.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/24/2016 8:16:00 PM
Nonono, YOU'RE extraordinary. :) You among many other poets/poetesses on this site have inspired this poem outah me. So thank you, Timothy, with all of my heart! To have it in your favorites is an honor!! Thank you for noticing the autumnal metaphor!! I have cherished your feedback and your poetry so so sooo much. Please keep being you! <3 ~Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/24/2016 12:08:00 AM
I find it amazing at how I never find myself scratching my head at the metaphors you use (and you use a lot of them!). They're different, unique ... and yet they are so easy to connect with, and paints a picture in my head that's always reflective.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/24/2016 12:05:00 AM
So many poignant expressions to savor. Like the "Rainfall of lights that permeate through eyes swirling lightening warmth into my own" << very celestial and intimate. I also liked your perception of autumn ... "their distant autumnal attentions" ... an original metaphor that made me think of people staring at dead things (the leaves) while you two were off enjoying the playful spring petals.
Date: 3/23/2016 8:48:00 PM
Hi Laura, Wow, that's so beautifully descriptive--a richly complex ode to a relationship. It has a I look forward to reading more of your work--and I see there is plenty. Cheers, Brian
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/23/2016 8:53:00 PM
Aw, thanks Brian! I look forward to exploring more of yours as well. (: ~Laura
Date: 3/23/2016 7:30:00 PM
This poem just glimmers with warm affection and is glittering with two hearts knowing destin perfection...love becomes a legacy when it creates a path for others to believe in Laura. "I just love to watch you smile, to take in every glimmering feeling..." this poem is a special confession that inspires me deeply Poetess...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/23/2016 8:01:00 PM
To inspire an amazing person, an incredible poet like you is worth everything to me, Justin. "I love to trace the silhouette of your grace, To paint sounds and syllables where your eyes will accept them" Those lines there were written with you and your poetry in mind, directly to you. You inspire me always. <3 ~Laura
Date: 3/23/2016 3:35:00 PM
You made this feel real, I am swept along by your rhythm and intention.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/23/2016 4:11:00 PM
The feelings are real Richard. I am immensely grateful for every soul I come across. Thank you for reading this one. I really felt compelled to write it. ~Laura
Date: 3/23/2016 3:30:00 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/23/2016 8:20:00 AM
It's a pleasure to share my heart with you, Ravi. Thanks for taking the time to read!~Laura
Date: 3/23/2016 1:47:00 AM
superb metaphore drenched write , that absolutely immerses and drownds the reader in your world, ...not many have this gift , .... you do
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/23/2016 8:21:00 AM
You're so awesome. I love your distinctive poetry. Your feedback and your support mean a lot to me! <3~Laura

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