Our True Song

When I'm with you, you sing to me a heartbeating song. Your sweet voice entrances me. Relaxed in your embrace, I begin to sing with you. Our voices harmonize the most amazing tune. Heartbeat to heartbeat; lips to lips; the last verse is sung and we come to the end. The lyrics stop, and the melody fades. The song is over.

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Jay Loveless

Date: 10/20/2009 10:32:00 AM

even if you start in with another poem...write about it and do as i have said. you have the ability, you have the power, now go and do so. with love, spirit sister ---Raiin

Jay Loveless

Date: 10/20/2009 10:31:00 AM

the song isnt over....take this, and go farther with it before the song comes to a close. there is so much more room for art to be spread in this one. it is lovely, and beautiful, and could easily captivate someone into a transe until it is over, but you havent yet gone far enough with it, take this and expand it, move it, push it farhter, build upon it until there is no more room left to even breath and it steals all the expression you have left except for a tear. make us speachless. xo Rain

Belinda Parish

Date: 2/12/2009 9:58:00 AM

It makes me think of you two in a relationship (you singing together) and then it ended (The song is over) I like it though, good write

Serenity D'Nae Montgomery

Date: 12/10/2008 9:25:00 AM

I really like this one. Its about tyler... As always lol....