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OOOPS! Contest Sponsor: John Lawless Date Written: February 29, 2016 FIRST POEM Somewhere between yes and no, where maybe doesn't matter, I slipped beneath the surface carrying your poor intentions. I suffered from those pitiable little private pieces of your clandestine verbal agreement. I knew I should've never trusted your counterfeit wealth. Beliefs upon my reality, missing pieces of jumbled yesterdays from past regressions. I needed acceptance into receiving willing patience and forgiving you for your relentless violence. I don't need any more reassurance than you have already given me. Once...maybe a mistake. Twice...scared me to death. Thrice...never again. You think you demolished my innocence. You think you damaged my essence irreparably. Your thoughts may be confused with your guiltless ambition. Sure....my aspirations slowly deflated with each swing and every coarse word you shrieked, but I am robust now. Because of your potent relationships with others, you dragged your character defects into your relationship with me. It has been established beyond doubt that you can't love without pain. When there is pain, there is you. When there is no pain, there is no you...without you...I am... FREE... alive without you you can not hurt me again I'm finally free ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Date Written: March 3, 2016 SECOND POEM I have fallen beneath the surface of your intentional abuse. Your revilement crushed me and I thought I was unable to live in a universe with constant contentment. You used your childhood as an illustration on how not to be a real man. You were never a real man. I was an exemplar of good success; people actually find it necessary to love me. Your necessity was to damage my inner core. The breaks and the bruises have finally subsided. You may think you destroyed my innocence, but I broke our bond before we were ever alliances. Keep telling yourself you demolished my essence, but I have been redemptive through our marriage, saving my soul for a true man to love me in completeness. This marriage has been destructive in ways there is no explanation. That ring on my finger will never be worn in my hopeful future. Your defects were carried from your previous relationships. I am not the only woman. I am one of many women.You thought you broke me. I am finally free from your relentless devastation you call love. Here's the thing.I will never be forced verbally or physically, AGAIN... you have no power I am the better person I believe in me ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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Date: 3/31/2016 4:47:00 AM
Hi Laura. Congrats for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/31/2016 4:35:00 AM
Hi Laura. Congrats for your awesome top placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/31/2016 2:00:00 PM
Thank you Teddy :)-luloo
Date: 3/30/2016 1:36:00 PM
Nice n Nicer. Congrats Laura. Hugs. Anisha D
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/30/2016 2:54:00 PM
Thank you Anisha :)-luloo
Date: 3/30/2016 12:11:00 PM
A beautiful progress to a beautiful you! Congrats Laura!
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/30/2016 2:54:00 PM
Thank you Balveen :)-luloo
Date: 3/30/2016 9:37:00 AM
Congratulations Laura, well done...
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/30/2016 10:07:00 AM
Thank you Charlie :)-luloo
Date: 3/30/2016 8:55:00 AM
Congratulations Laura on your breathtaking win! You are truly a matchless poet! And plus, you never failed to make me smile with your words. :) -HANS
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/30/2016 10:06:00 AM
Aw thank you Hans, you are very sweet :)-luloo
Date: 3/30/2016 1:18:00 AM
Wonderful poetry n win Laura.. big congrats!
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/30/2016 10:06:00 AM
Thank you Dr. Upma :)-luloo
Date: 3/29/2016 7:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest, Laura. Any kind of abuse is a bad thing and only a strong person with a support group will overcome. Peace my friend:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/29/2016 9:09:00 PM
Thank you very much DT..:)-luloo
Date: 3/29/2016 6:30:00 PM
Laura, the power of the line "when there is no pain, there is no you...without you....I am". Fictional though these two Haibun may be they should be read. The second poem starts with the dagger line "I have fallen beneath the surface of your intentional abuse." Great job and thanks for participating in the contest.
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Date: 3/29/2016 6:58:00 PM
Aw thank you John...I am grateful you enjoyed it, thank you very much and have a great night :)-luloo
Date: 3/17/2016 5:18:00 PM
Laura, you have penned a masterpiece of fiction; charged with affirmations empowering any who have suffered abuse. You write like a pro... expressions winning already. Thank you for sharing. Bless you dear one. (I have been abused, fractured jaw, verbal; threat of death. They went to jail, died.)
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Date: 3/4/2016 11:37:00 PM
Laura, honestly both poems for me are wow and outstanding, each one wonderfully penned, and I am loving them 7 ~
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/5/2016 9:39:00 AM
Thank you BW for all your kind feedback. You are very sweet and know how to make my day a little brighter :)-luloo *thanks*
Date: 3/3/2016 3:09:00 PM
I'd like to believe this doesn't happen as often as it does, sorry to say well done. Love
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 3:11:00 PM
Yes it happens way too often. Many thanks -luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/3/2016 2:51:00 PM
Isn't it interesting how we see things differently through fresh eyes. I often do this and wonder..."How could I have written something so poorly?" Nice editing, Laura.
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Date: 3/3/2016 5:35:00 PM
Thank you Lin, sorry I miss your comment earlier! The thing is, is that I could barely remember how I wrote the first one. After a few days all I could remember was the theme and the bolded endings for both of them:)-luloo
Date: 3/3/2016 2:30:00 PM
powerful write.. i like both of them, lou.. huggs!
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 2:32:00 PM
Thank you very much Nette :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/3/2016 2:05:00 PM
- A wonderful poem, Laura - March 8 is International Women's Day, are you ready :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 2:15:00 PM
Wow I really hope there are rallys for support fellowship :)
Date: 3/3/2016 2:01:00 PM
I found this exercise to be very beneficial, you? Your poems are powerful and send a message of not tolerating abuse and overcoming it. Very emotive write, Laura. Peace my friend:)
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Date: 3/3/2016 2:18:00 PM
I enjoyed the fact that I basically forgot how I wrote the first poem! I remembered a few things and comparing them was very interesting. I did remember how I ended the first one with FREE. Yes beneficial indeed. Thank you -luloo

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