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Only One Voice

Deep funnels gurgling From abysmal drums rumbling Dark caves humming gargled songs Where light silent falls. Eddies swirling rise like winds As bubbles bounce: white mothballs The winds rustle leaves Strings of sighing violins The heart swishing, dance the beat Of lovers laughing Footfalls by rivers murmuring Where the mountains’ wood dove wails

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Date: 5/1/2009 2:08:00 PM

The vivid images convey your thoughts in a powerful and creative way in this poem. Nice use of alliteration. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for the kind words on my lanterne. Keep on writing! Karen

Shiki Remindio

Date: 4/30/2009 11:19:00 PM

Oh, it's just heavenly. I think, no, I know that I can hear that river, I know I can see the mountains, I know, I know, everything that you put... thank you. ~Shiki

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/27/2009 7:29:00 AM

Beautiful sedoka. All the best.

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 4/25/2009 7:33:00 AM

Hello L'nass, very nice poem. As if I could hear the drums rumbling, the rivers murmuring, the sighing of the violin. Wonderful. Very poetic. Thank you for sharing. Ernilando

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 4/21/2009 7:19:00 AM

A lot of movement in this. Vince

Tyesha Ehigiator

Date: 4/20/2009 6:35:00 AM

Wonderful piece here, It made me laugh a little bit, had to imagine this in my mind.. very descriptive with incredible imagery.You have painted an intriguing picture here, I love(The heart swishing, dance the beat Of lovers laughing) Awesome~ God Bless and Best Wishes Always, Tyesha

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/19/2009 7:19:00 PM

L'nass, this may sound funny, but this overall humming with clouds and darkness approaching fills me with the same fear I felt when I was a lad and coach sent us racing home on our bicycles when we spotted a tornado in the distance coming our way (about 1965) terror amid the calm, hard to explain, cool poem, Jim

Abe Lopez

Date: 4/18/2009 2:46:00 PM

Nice display of sounds.

Sue Mason

Date: 4/18/2009 10:45:00 AM

The first stanza reminds me of my "Witches Poem" and then it moved into another place with the violins ... thought I was back in the cave for awhile there ... LOL ... great imagery ... love "the heart swishing" !!

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 4/18/2009 10:21:00 AM

Hello L'nass.. there certainly is a roll in your poems these days.... beautifully conceived images....

Arany P.

Date: 4/18/2009 4:00:00 AM

the music in your words ... are really awesome! each line evolves so beatifully!! lovely choka ... best wishes L'nass!! ~ Arany

Brian Strand

Date: 4/18/2009 12:32:00 AM

Best wishes with this one L'nass.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 4/17/2009 9:06:00 PM

this is lovely..I LOVE the last line. BG See soup mail

Sharon Winter

Date: 4/17/2009 2:12:00 PM

Wow. I'm in love with this one. Your descriptive imagery is astounding. Love, Shar

Lena Townsend

Date: 4/17/2009 2:10:00 PM

Beautiful, a peaceful write. It is full of images that capture the heart. Very happy and light. Well done. Great luck in the contest if this is for the contest. Smiles from Lolita~ thank you for all your wonderful contests.

Raul Moreno

Date: 4/17/2009 1:11:00 PM

Thanks for supporting my contest...Raul

Diane Christian

Date: 4/17/2009 12:51:00 PM

what a beautiful poem, I am not familiar with choka but this is just wonderful, thanks for all your kind comments on my poetry God bless you from diane

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/17/2009 10:34:00 AM

wonderful melody in this well written literature,like a violin your verses and notes-bravo as always-charma

Michael Jordan

Date: 4/17/2009 9:44:00 AM

L'nass - I apologize for taking so long to reply - I have been dealing with a lot of health issues the last couple of years and I'm just now getting back into life and it has me very busy - I love the way you write and this poem made me smile a very peaceful and loving smile at the end - You know I posted a poem long ago called Construction - Reconstruction which is basically the story of my life - I will asap catch up on some more of your poetry ok, God Bless, MJ

John Rhinem

Date: 4/17/2009 9:11:00 AM

"Hello Gifted, Blessed & Wonderful L'nass!!!":):)~"You" are always so soulful within "Your Wonderful Words of Hearts Verse!!!":):)~And this write seems to be somewhat bittersweet; amid its depthful compassions perhaps!!?~"You" have quickly became one of my very favorite writers of all time within this place and beyond~"Excellent & Stirring Write!!!"~"My Love & Warmth Always To 'You & Your Loves,' John!!!":):)~Lets go view another of "Your" writes....

Emily Kroeger

Date: 4/17/2009 8:46:00 AM

wow I like itits marvalous

Marvin Anderson

Date: 4/17/2009 8:18:00 AM

nice. Where light silent falls. nice line.