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One Slow Motion Jagged Tear

One slow motion jagged tear found me after you left me here. Its wetness sits still upon my face as I stare at absolutely no place. What I do live and what I dream and all sundries fitting in between, now struggle in a frenzied dance passing thru, in and out, this circumstance. My brain is mush circling a clueless groove. Surely I need attempt an enlightened next move. Acceptance failed to enter as you shut the door, yet life as I knew it just quit being anymore. I find I simply cannot find my identity. Perhaps it left with you and my clarity. I seek the fetal position to settle my shout, but fail as foreign fear painfully moans out. Took years upon years to grow the weeds that saturated our passionate love seeds. One, final quarrel for over's mural – over ... gone - long did time hold this deed to crush in a moment’s stampede. So blurred is our delaying need - I cannot quite feel to recall, was it owned by fear or urge to succeed? ... CayCay December 22, 2016

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Date: 2/11/2017 11:08:00 AM
You managed to tell me all the sadness in you in this poem, I didn't read the words, I felt the emotions. Congratulations my friend.
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Date: 12/29/2016 8:07:00 AM
This one tugs at my heart strings, CayCay:) I simply love such sad poetry:) maybe because sadness is one thing which unites us all in this world:)
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Date: 12/24/2016 1:08:00 PM
CayCay I think this is my poor daughter is feeling right now. I know you are happy and this is a reflection of the past. A very well written emotive piece. I am assuming it is for a contest? If so, this should do well. ; ) 7
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Date: 12/22/2016 7:47:00 PM
gosh, so emotive and so deep, Caycay. I think I know who it is but maybe I am wrong. Very good writing on a difficult topic. It is so sincere, just like your courage poem which I shall go revisit right NOW
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Date: 12/22/2016 6:58:00 PM
Well written rhyme...I think many identify with this in their lives...afraid to stay the same...afraid to change. We writers are fortunate that we can "bleed" those moments onto paper:)
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Date: 12/22/2016 3:27:00 PM
I hope it was the desire to succeed,but at what I'm not sure. Digging up bones was never my favorite. Some things, I have to leave buried. A deep write, CayCay.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/22/2016 5:05:00 PM
I found your warm Christmas wishes and gladly received them. We are ready and in the mood, it is fun with Kyle here. I want joy to pour down, an absolute drenching, upon you and your home - I've ordered it, but it may be on back order. Such things are tricky. Thank you for reading and much else. All the best ... CayCay
Date: 12/22/2016 3:01:00 PM
That ending got me...was it because we failed...have a Merry Christmas CayCay
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/22/2016 5:02:00 PM
Hi, Tim, thank you for commenting. I'm sure that by now you've gotten over the ending. Thank you for the Christmas wishes and please know that I want you to have a joy-filled Christmas and New Year. My oh my - 2017 is coming! Blessings ... CayCay
Date: 12/22/2016 2:33:00 PM
Such emotion in your lines CayCay I think many who have been in a similar situation will relate to your poem:-( You have moved on now and are happy my friend... Happy Christmas to you, Tim and your lovely Kyle:-) xx hugs Jan xx
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/22/2016 2:51:00 PM
YES I'm better than good with my coupling! The point was those wasted years of staying in place because people prefer the hell they know to one they don't and various other fears. I wish you a very Merry Christmas, too! We are going to Mom's on the 24th and staying until the 26th and my mood is getting more and more excited about sharing yet another Christmas with 3 people I love most. May joy find you and keep on Christmas day ... CayCay
Date: 12/22/2016 2:31:00 PM
CayCay , very well done. I am sure many can relate to this and you are not alone. Merry Christmas. May it bring peace.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/22/2016 2:53:00 PM
Sweet Heidi - this isn't happening in my life right now, but I know the emotion and that many, many others know it also. I appreciate your comments and hope all is golden in your world. Have a merry Christmas and God bless ... CayCay
Date: 12/22/2016 2:09:00 PM
Tis quite simple - Life is like a game of poker: The higher the stakes and the more you put into the pot...The harder it is to fold! Your poem strikes a chord with us all, methinks. May I take this opportunity to wish you a wonderful Christmas, CayCay...And a happy New Year! My warmest regards and very best wishes...As always of course. :) john
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/22/2016 2:56:00 PM
Good to not see you John - I enjoy your visits and this comment of yours is perfect. I agree, many can relate to the feel of that door shutting, that one second when everything changes. Thank you also for the Christmas wishes! I intend of make happy Christmas memories this year and I'm getting excited. I pray you and yours have a joyous holiday that last all of 2017. All the best ... CayCay
Date: 12/22/2016 1:30:00 PM
Profoundly beautiful from a dark place. Really enjoyed.
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Date: 12/22/2016 2:57:00 PM
Madeleine - I am absolutely delighted that you shared your reaction to my poem. Thank you for taking the time to comment and know that I wish you all the best ... CayCay
Date: 12/22/2016 1:07:00 PM
Awesome poem CayCay ! We are so confused after a break up. I was divorced 20 years ago and still don't know why.
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Date: 12/22/2016 2:59:00 PM
I don't know whether to laugh or frown, so I did both! Thank you so much for sharing your 'poem reaction' with me. Sometimes I'm sure that confused should be middle name! All the best, Bruce ... CayCay

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