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One Night In a Haunted Manner Premiere Contest Winner

I missed a blind corner one grim stormy night, On a dark forest road, with no phone. The crash was severe, but what gave me more fright Was I had to walk out all alone. A mile, maybe two, and there loomed into view An imposing stone manor, quite old. I felt somewhat spooked, but I guessed it would do For relief from the drizzle and cold. Despite my loud knocking I heard no reply, Though some embers from somewhere glowed red. The door opened wide when I gave it a try, And its groan somehow filled me with dread. I crept toward the flickering warmth where I found A mere wisp of a man in a chair, So pale in appearance he hardly seemed sound— Like a shadow that’s only half-there. I saw he was napping and hadn’t a clue, So decided to give him a tap, But to my amazement, my fingers went through His left arm and right down to his lap! I gasped in sheer horror and rushed out the door, Though I never before had believed In spirits or hauntings or vampiric lore, So I wondered if I’d been deceived. This mystery troubled me long years ago, But I now understand it: you see, That car wreck I mentioned was fatal, and so... The ghost wasn’t him; it was me. --- Date Written: January 16, 2019 Contest: One Night in a Haunted Manor, sponsored by Tania Kitchin

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Date: 2/7/2019 9:46:00 PM
Hello Ed! You have such a wonderful cpmposition.
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Rocell Grace Aranas
Date: 2/7/2019 9:47:00 PM
Date: 2/5/2019 1:22:00 AM
Ed, your poem is hauntingly sad. Very brilliantly written, never expected the ending
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Date: 2/1/2019 6:32:00 PM
Hello Ed Morris, your ending to this poem is spooky. have a nice evening my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 2/3/2019 7:49:00 AM
You are welcome my friend. Have a nice day .
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Ed Morris
Date: 2/1/2019 9:43:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene.
Date: 1/30/2019 11:15:00 PM
Really enjoyed this, not sure if that a good way of describing the affect? But thought it was quite well written and clever!!
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/31/2019 2:30:00 PM
Thanks, Linda. Glad it affected you in some way, whether or not enjoyment is a good description. :-)
Date: 1/26/2019 7:26:00 PM
Ed, this was fabulous! I really enjoyed it! Especially the ending. Good job! Susan
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/27/2019 2:22:00 PM
Thank you, Susan. Glad I could amuse someone besides myself. :-)
Date: 1/24/2019 9:29:00 AM
I love this poem! It's rhythm, rhyme, the story, the twist! BRAVO!!!! Congratulations!!!!
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/24/2019 10:57:00 AM
Thank you, P.S.
Date: 1/24/2019 7:29:00 AM
It's all been said below,Ed. A well-deserved win and the arm incident gave me a flashback to 'The invisible man' by H.G.Wells. Your rhythm and rhyme were as always impeccable!
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/24/2019 10:57:00 AM
Thank you, Wendy.
Date: 1/24/2019 3:25:00 AM
Congrats on you top placement Ed, your poem truly deserved it. Compelling to read and a great ending. Kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/24/2019 10:56:00 AM
Thank you, Ann.
Date: 1/23/2019 9:48:00 PM
This was just great! The rhythm kept me rolling along, reminds me of James Whitcomb Riley! Ingenious!
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/24/2019 10:56:00 AM
Thank you, Andrew.
Date: 1/23/2019 8:17:00 PM
Excellent story, flow and great twist at the end! Your poem was fantastic and deserved top spot, Ed! Congrats on your win! :)
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/23/2019 8:31:00 PM
Thank you, Laura.
Date: 1/23/2019 7:27:00 PM
Nicely done, Ed, you have created great imagery and feeling on your well written poem. . Congratulations on your win . Hugs Eve ~`*
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/23/2019 7:50:00 PM
Thank you, Eve.
Date: 1/23/2019 7:07:00 PM
WOW!! What a captivating story told in verse with a Hitchcock-like twist at the end. Didn't see that coming, Ed, and am so glad to see your poem placing first in Tania's contest. So very well-deserved! Congratulations, my friend. You seem to be on a roll with success. Hugs, Carolyn
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/23/2019 7:19:00 PM
Thank you, Carolyn.
Date: 1/23/2019 5:12:00 PM
Excellent spooky poem Ed, love the ending, congratulations on your first place trophy win!
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 1/23/2019 6:17:00 PM
I also really liked your play on words with the title, "haunted manner", it was very fitting with the story!
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Ed Morris
Date: 1/23/2019 6:01:00 PM
Thank you very much, Tania. It took me awhile to come up with an idea for this contest, but once I did, I had a lot of fun writing it. :-)

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