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One Night

One word will take me there, One soundless gaze One glimmer on your lips One inhalation One feeling One night... We breathe eachother We fall together As space between us closes As the language of our desires Reach our intwined inspirations, Silence is shamed Do not doubt it- Do not fear it- Our love is loud between us Natural, fleshy, grand and brave Sparks shoot off in my brain, Spiralling down to my heart's core Chemicals combine Cells are nurtured, I feel your painful need Expanding my chest's tingles, My lungs working for a new kind of oxygen, The heat within raging and possessing me Well and long do we all deny What our very bodies battle for No more, no more! I will not shy away from your caress Nor tear myself empty from your arms I shall let my deepest oceans rise In your moonlit light The restless gravity of your love Pulling the tides Yes, one night, One sensation One divine right Through many sighs, Through the hot glow of Destiny's skies, We shall die and be made infinite

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Poet Tacito

Date: 3/28/2016 11:20:00 AM

Incredibly intense. "Motion in the ocean", redefined.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/23/2016 3:33:00 PM

This is hot hot hot!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/23/2016 6:24:00 PM

Thanks Richard! ^_^ Hope you enjoyed~Laura

Ashley Evans

Date: 3/22/2016 7:48:00 PM

Love How You Put Your Word. Amazing Job Ashley Hugs Xxxxx

Ashley Evans
Date: 5/26/2016 11:08:00 PM

your so very welcome.go check out my poems,keep up the amazing work

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 7:54:00 PM

Thank you Ashley! Thanks for the feedback and for reading! <3~Laura

Jan Allison

Date: 3/22/2016 6:59:00 PM

so sensual Laura a fabulous write:-) hugs Jan xx7

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 7:14:00 PM

Thanks Jan for your cheer and sweet visit.~Laura

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 3/21/2016 7:43:00 PM

i'm not familiar with your work, but i'm liking your style...'our love is loud between us' is a great line!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 9:04:00 AM

Thanks for reading this one Charlotte! I will be exploring your work as well - I appreciate the feedback on it (: ~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 3/21/2016 7:11:00 PM

The word one can also spell the word eon, this truth seems to encapsulate the romantic splendor of this poem Laura...in love, all that is needed for infinity isa single moment of union. "My lungs working for a new kind of ooxygen...The restless gravity of your love pulling the tides." The alchemy of love, death and forever are so beautifully alive in you Poetess..J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 9:03:00 AM

As always, Justin you are spot on! I wanted to fuse them all together into something new to breathe. It's really about the heart battling the mind here, and letting doubts and fears fly away to make room for greater things that will last forever. It's about speaking about these desires without fear of being shamed or ridiculed for it. It's about the death of those fears and the death of the old man mentalities, eternalizing soul power by love. You understand this one, thank you sweet Poet! ~Laura

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/21/2016 7:03:00 PM

This sure was a sensual piece of writing, Laura. An exciting rush to the mind (and heart's) imagination. "My lungs working for a new kind of oxygen" ... loved this line! It's as if you're exploring new territory and not sure how to proceed ... but the body carries on in any case. And of course, a killer ending too ... I wonder why love and lust is often associated with death? Perhaps because it's a former mentality that is dying, like the cocoon dies so the butterfly can emerge. Great poem!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 8:55:00 AM

I s'pose that ending can go in many directions, and yes, exactly! Yay, I'm glad you liked that line, and thanks for your cool feedback on this poem. I was trying to underline a bit of mind vs body in this poem, in this case they are on the same wavelength. My favorite lines of this poem are "Well and long do we all deny what our very bodies battle for--No more, no more!" ~Laura

Tom Quigley

Date: 3/21/2016 6:35:00 PM

Wow! Steamy!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 8:47:00 AM

Yep! (: Thanks for reading, Tom! ~Laura