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For the Glen Hughes poetry contest by Robert James Liquori

This is a fictional poem inspired by the song 'Why don't you stay' byt Glenn Hughes.

When we first met, you adored me, from sunrise to sunset. We would stay up all night, infatuated like lovebirds and I'm still wondering.... What went wrong. When did you run out of things to say? Over one million apologies later, I'm still sorry. I still remember your last goodbye, How I begged you not to go. I still don't know why you had to leave. I'm broken from forgotten promises, so I wonder is 'forever' just make believe? I lay in a barren bed. Your photo still sits on my bedside, your nightdress in the closet, I can't help but stare at them all the time. I can still feel your kiss, but there is so much more I miss, your smile and your touch. I still drink form your mug, It reminds me without you there is only emptiness. Your melody still lingers, in the stillness of my existence and I'm just numb, from the pain of loneliness. I know I write too many poems about you, but it hurts that I am now nothing, someone you don't want around, but each word is a tear, in each verse a breathless sigh. You were the air keeping me alive. Without you, this poetry seems pointless. All the petals have lost their scent and I'm still waiting for a rainbow, to end this storm. I wonder how long, I will remain in this silence. As life revolves, all I can hear is that Glenn Hughes song, forever echoing 'why don't you stay?'

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Date: 5/5/2024 11:52:00 AM
Silent One, you've described one of man's most ancient problems--she leaves. I had this happen to me a few times, but learned from each experience! The funny part is that we keep some of each relationship with us that surfaces from time to time.
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Date: 4/8/2024 7:01:00 PM
Oh! How I love sad broken love poems, they make my heart hop. There would be no space left if I wrote all my favourite lines. Loved the title. The first verse reminded me of myself, a question I'd love to ask. "When did you run out of things to say? Over one million apologies later." Probably when the heart no longer beats as it should. And yes! I think forever does not exist too, just something I say and believe in to soothe my delusions. Maybe there's a rainbow, but not where you look.
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Date: 4/8/2024 7:06:00 PM
Maybe it would come from someone else. "Your melody still lingers, in the stillness of my existence and I'm just numb." These pains are so strong they leave you motionless. And the songs, I hate it when every song reminds me of the promises. I hate promises, I hate words. I don't want no Replays of lies told and untold. This song by Ariana Grande" We can't be friends." Is just a visualisation of what we want. The video suggests we delete the memories of the hurt and the person so we can live. I wish we could.
Date: 4/8/2024 5:19:00 AM
Deeply emotive, a heartfelt write, SO. You always shine, my friend.
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Date: 4/8/2024 4:07:00 AM
Pain and pathos overwhelmingly reside in your lines of romantic torment Silent One! "But each word is a tear" haunts me the most. I can so relate to that! A perfect entry for the contest! A happy Monday to you!!
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Date: 4/8/2024 1:48:00 AM
No poem is pointless. Pity she left you. I know the pain of parting. The Last Waltz is a perfect example.
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Silent One
Date: 4/8/2024 3:50:00 AM
This if fictional, as pointed out in the notes.. Thanks for your visit.
Date: 4/7/2024 11:05:00 PM
And now I am listening to some music I didn't know. I sadly listen to FM radio and don't venture far. My 26 year old roomie who is a Spotify wiz is introducing me to more. I love your poem. - Susan
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Date: 4/7/2024 1:41:00 PM
That songs evokes many a memory dear Silent, I can feel the longing of the heart in this one, thanks for sharing your emotional pen today love it
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Date: 4/7/2024 12:18:00 PM
A remarkable poem, my dear friend, SO, focused on the Glen Hughes song. The poem evoked a sense of melancholy, leaving the reader deep in thought. Although fictional, the story resonates with the universal experience of relationships growing stagnant and conversations losing their warmth. This applies not only to romantic relationships but also to other types of connections. As I often mention, change is the only constant in life.
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Date: 4/7/2024 9:43:00 AM
A great write, Silent. Enjoy your day.
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Date: 4/7/2024 9:16:00 AM
Clever use of the song title and singers name in the poem there silent one. Brilliant altho fictional, at some point we all have been through such emotions, where relationships run dry, conversations go cold, not just in romantic relationships but also in other relations, as i always say, the only thing constant about life is change, everything seems to be changing yet still the same in some ways, i love how this flows like a song lyric, simple and straight on point, very poignant: ah honeymoon period is always sweet and honeylicious, lol ! Beautifully depicted what the lyrics convey! And i have another song which comes to my mind “ i want you to stay” by two other singers too. When i read the ending i thought of them too. Pleasure reading this! This must score high I believe! Best wishes
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Date: 4/7/2024 9:15:00 AM
parts of this poem remind me of the poetic line from Arthur Prysock: "Blindfolded I could kiss a thousand mouths and know your lips"
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Date: 4/7/2024 9:08:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/story. Sometimes apologies are not what the person wants. What it is, I do not know. Have a blessed day writing away...........
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Date: 4/7/2024 8:56:00 AM
"Your melody still lingers, in the stillness of my existence and I'm just numb, from the pain of loneliness." A broken heart is a wound that keeps rubbing itself raw -- never heals without leaving a scar. I hear you. Well done.
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Date: 4/7/2024 8:10:00 AM
Well written Silent One ! Such deep longing described. :)
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Date: 4/7/2024 6:33:00 AM
- Songs make us remember good or bad things in life... a beautiful and haunting poem... love is vulnerable and requires a lot of care... or it withers and dies - Best wishes in the contest, S.O. :) - Have a nice sunday :) - hugs
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Date: 4/7/2024 6:05:00 AM
a fantastic poem centered around the Glen Hughes song. Your poem was fittingly melancholic and left the reader pondering 'How long will he remain in silence?" Although your poem is free verse it gently flows and makes for a pleasant read. Enjoy your day, Sara
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