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the ground shakes dust swirls in the air cattle stampede pandemonium animals on the run forest fire downriver the water tumbles no going back wildebeest confusion crossing the raging torrents green pasture allure -------------------------------------- 28th November, 2015 Contest: Open Poetry Sponsor: Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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Skat A

Date: 12/15/2015 11:31:00 PM

PAUL, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**

Paul Callus
Date: 12/16/2015 10:48:00 AM

Thank you, Skat:) ~~ All the best ~~ paul

Susan Gentry

Date: 12/15/2015 12:20:00 AM

Congratulations! Good one!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/15/2015 12:22:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, Susan:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/14/2015 6:56:00 PM

oh , some animal haiku!! I enjoyed seeing this on the winner list, Paul. Congrats to you.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/15/2015 12:21:00 PM

Thank you lots, Andrea. I was in a rush to write it...that's where the title came from! // paul

Rob Carmack

Date: 12/14/2015 4:16:00 PM

I liked the imagery and the feeling of rush this string makes. Congrats.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2015 4:22:00 PM

Thank you, Rob. Enjoyed your winning entry! ~ Regards // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 12/14/2015 2:31:00 PM

At last, one I can understand..sometimes I just don't get it...congrats Paul. BG

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2015 4:09:00 PM

I am glad that you had no trouble with understanding my haiku, Barbara:) Thank you for stopping by with congrats. ~ Regards // paul

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 12/14/2015 11:15:00 AM

effective haiku chain here, the more tempestuous side of nature, but with the "green pasture allure" beckoning at the end...a lovely contrast to broken wings' 'winter sparrows' poem, so i placed them together - congrats on your win in my contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2015 4:05:00 PM

Thank you Charlotte; I'm so pleased to be on your winners' list! It was my pleasure participating in your contest:) I also like the feedback to my haiku string. ~ All the best. // paul

Balveen Cheema

Date: 12/14/2015 10:59:00 AM

The wild beast confusion must have lead to a traffic jam, but sounds nervy and frightening! Well done, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2015 4:21:00 PM

It's an awesome sight when animals are frightened or on the run. Once I saw a captivating Serengeti documentary which portrayed such scenes; still vivid in my mind! Thank you for the comments and the congrats. ~ regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/14/2015 10:57:00 AM

Paul, I enjoyed reading your well written piece this morning. Great imagery.Congratulations on your win it was well deserved:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2015 4:11:00 PM

Many thanks, Alexis. The congrats, and lovely comments are much appreciated. ~ All the best:) // paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 12/4/2015 4:16:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your poem very much. Definitely wouldn't want to be there and become a Haiku! You describe the chaos of confusion and nature so well that I couldn't imagine an end to it. CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2015 4:23:00 PM

So glad that you found this to your liking, CayCay! Your feedback is always appreciated:) Have a lovely weekend. ~ Regards // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/1/2015 1:12:00 PM

Great story telling using a difficult form. Hope to see you on the winning list.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2015 4:20:00 PM

Thank you Armand for reading and showing faith in these haiku. Have just been reading your latest poem...excellent! Pleased to have you back:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/30/2015 2:21:00 AM

Paul, this a short poem compiling one of James poems.. beautiful bouncing imagery, he tried to challenged me but I somehow don't know much regarding this topic that I refused.. =`) hugs! Paul, its neeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaar!~Olive ELoisa =`)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2015 4:03:00 PM

Thank you Olive_eloi:) You know me well enough by now to know that I like short poems ... You don't usually shy away from a challenge:) Do go back to that topic and have another go at it! Be brave and daring!:) Hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/29/2015 11:14:00 PM

Stunning imagery in this breathtaking piece Paul. I hope to see this as a top winner!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2015 3:50:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely reaction, Connie:) I have not been much on Soup, just sporadic appearances as other priorities had to be seen to. Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 11/29/2015 1:38:00 AM

Excellent. Well penned. Good luck for the contest. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2015 2:17:00 PM

It was my pleasure to share, Ravi:) Glad that you enjoyed...thank you. ~ All the best. // paul

Lu Loo

Date: 11/28/2015 6:58:00 PM

Wonderful Paul gl in the contest! -lu *smiles*

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2015 2:11:00 PM

Thank you Laura. I sent you a reply earlier, but somehow it was not registered! ~ All the best. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/28/2015 5:55:00 PM

Great string of haiku Paul good luck i the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/28/2015 6:00:00 PM

Thank you, Jan....fast on the draw, first to comment:) Goodnight:) Hugs // paul