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One Broken Monoku

decayed junkyard swarms- disgusted maggots noise Created on 11/18/14 for- “One Broken Monoku” – Poetry Contest

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/28/2014 10:56:00 PM

ewwww, what an image. Do they make noise?? that is really creepy, Earl!!

Earl Schumacker
Date: 11/29/2014 9:15:00 AM

Hi Andrea, Thank you for commenting. Sorry for grossing you out. Yes they do make noise when you get a bunch of them together in some garbage. It is really disgusting. I'm sure we can think about nicer subjects. As writers we have to touch on all aspects of life and death. Sometimes it's dirty business. Have a pleasant week end. Take care. Earl

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 11/28/2014 10:12:00 PM

Hi Earl, you took your monuku to a completely different place. I love it! Thanks for reminding me about the small gifts contest. I intended to enter my poem but forgot. I'm not sure if it's what Brian is looking for, but I'll give it a try...have a great weekend...hugs, Rhonda

Earl Schumacker
Date: 11/29/2014 9:18:00 AM

Hi Rhonda, Thank you. Good luck in the contest. Take care. Earl

Jan Allison

Date: 11/28/2014 4:41:00 PM

wow deep dark imagery Earl - it chilled me somewhat reading this the thought of rot and decay - great write good luck:-) Hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 11/28/2014 5:51:00 PM

yes i got imagery of maggots ewww and flies buzzing round everywhere:-( hugs Jan xxx

Earl Schumacker
Date: 11/28/2014 5:40:00 PM

Hi Jan, Thank you. As you know, we writers have to go into those deep dark places and unearth the unsavory things in life also. I tried to create an image here by heading in that direction, without really going there, which I understand is the idea behind this poetic form. I will find out soon enough. It is gross though isn't it? Have a great week end. Earl