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One Breath

One breath a sigh embodied by the living host Hallelujah rises in congregation breathlessly a choral of love It’s in the dying’s throat one last breath It’s up in smoke It’s the opening and closing of a classic The book sits on the mourner’s lap It says all there is to say of bygone days Tune into the ever after Laughter shall be it’s mainstay unless you go the other way I will pray

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Beata Agustin

Date: 11/1/2023 12:22:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thank you for sharing this. God bless you.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/1/2023 5:07:00 AM

Thank you so much, Beata! <3

Paige Hind

Date: 10/30/2023 6:37:00 PM

It reads like you are sharing a secret. Congrats on your win, Kim!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/31/2023 5:59:00 AM

Thank you, Paige!

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/30/2023 10:34:00 AM

Laughter shall be it’s mainstay unless you go the other way. Congratulations on your win, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:59:00 PM

Thank you, Lasaad! I always appreciate your insightful comments1

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/30/2023 10:09:00 AM

a choral of love, no greater hymn that the hymn of love from the big book. Love this a fav for me Kim, you won me over ! congrats

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:59:00 PM

Thank you so much xx

Bill Baker

Date: 10/30/2023 12:16:00 AM

The word play ... "Unless you go the other way", was a nice twist in your poem. I like the way you think, it's intriguing. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:31:00 AM

Thank you so much, Bill!

Yann Rolland

Date: 10/29/2023 5:46:00 PM

o love the spiritual move of your words; we have to get hopes thanks poet yann

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:31:00 AM

Thank you, Yann!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/29/2023 4:24:00 PM

an outstanding creative write, Kim! I love the structure of your poem and the spiritual nature and message. It flowed; I enjoyed reading it. Have a blessed evening, Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:32:00 AM

Thank you kindly, Sara! <3

Mark Hughes

Date: 10/29/2023 8:56:00 AM

Your writing talents on display, well done Kim!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:33:00 AM

Thank you so much, Mark!

Karen Jones

Date: 10/29/2023 12:52:00 AM

Creative and spiritual.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/30/2023 4:33:00 AM

Thank you, Karen!