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For the No Placement Or Share A Poem Poetry Contest of Constance La France

"N/A in Open Poetry 8" “Nothing gold can stay” Title of short poem by Robert Frost Once upon a time I was a stream that trickled along carefree, knowing nothing of the mighty river I’d soon be merging with. Once upon a time I was a small, fresh, budding flower. Rosy were my cheeks in youth’s frondesence. Brutal winters I knew nothing of. Once upon a time I was a happy melody, gradually quickening with liveliness, believing that joy was the tune I’d always be carrying. Once upon a time I was the swing behind my grandparents’ farm house on which a child’s legs could furiously pump with enough momentum to bring herself closer to the sky. I was the ivy climbing that cozy yellow farm house and the country lane beside which raspberries could be plucked and one could skip along on many an endless summer day. Never did I stop to think one day my grandparents’ house would be repainted; the swing, forsaken, would disappear; and that country lane which seemed to stretch forever before it reached the highway was but a mere half mile when years later my grandparents had vanished too, and with curiosity, I revisited that first of my many old childhood’s haunts. Once upon a time I was a worshiper of sunshine, a seeker of four-leaf clovers, a watcher of clouds’ amazingly changing formations, a wisher upon the fluff of dandelions, a taster of snowflakes falling on my tongue, a daydreamer and a night dreamer who knew the thrill of one’s body lifting off ground into flight. Sunshine now comes, and I most often stay inside; I spend no time searching the grass for four-leaf clovers nor lying in the grass to gaze at clouds; I see dandelions with fluff and quickly pluck them from my lawn; Snow can pile up, and I’ll not be going out to play in it; Seldom do I daydream, and my lovely dreams of flying all have flown away. Today - roses’ thorns have plucked my soul. I’ve felt many a bitter winter storm. Also, I can hear life’s melody rallentando. Sooner than I care to know, it will have become a dirge.

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Date: 4/22/2024 6:28:00 AM
Andrea, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful poem, I love the quote, Constance
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Date: 4/16/2024 7:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your. What a powerful write/story. Many changes in a life. Keep your great memories... Have a blessed day writing away.........................
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Date: 4/14/2024 1:29:00 PM
I love the shape of your free verse Andrea. Your words are enchanting and thought-provoking. Enjoyable! Congratulations! :)
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Date: 3/13/2024 6:35:00 PM
'Loss of Innocence,' 'Coming of Age,' whatever you want to call this -- it sure works for me.
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Date: 3/11/2024 5:03:00 PM
Andrea, I love the last line. It actually caused me to chuckle. As you point out, we do slow down and lose some of our excitement. I'm trying not to, fathoming being older, and realizing that I do want to stay excited about something if possible. I wish you could take flying lessons since flying is a lot of fun and exciting. It's also a bit risky, but if you have a good teacher, you would be OK.
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Date: 3/11/2024 4:32:00 PM
Makes the heart ache sometimes, looking back on childhood innocence... a beautiful work
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Date: 3/9/2024 10:06:00 PM
Wow “ a wisher upon the fluff of dandelions, a taster of snowflakes falling on my tongue,” where do i start praising this sweet andrea this is beyond brilliant so descriptive and so heartfelt too. “ Today - roses’ thorns have plucked my soul. I’ve felt many a bitter winter storm.” that hits so strong and deep! A fave this is for me. As it resonates so strongly. Looking back at the old times and accepting todays reality. Well delivered. Im sure it will be a winner. Love it
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Date: 3/9/2024 4:30:00 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, Andrea. I identified with the upbeat 'once upon a times' verses and can also identify with the melancholic last two verses. How differently we all see the world once we've endured winter storms, disappointments, and hardships...as if life sucked our spirits out of us. Beautiful contest entry. have a great evening, hugs, Sara
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Date: 3/9/2024 3:05:00 PM
Oh! I really loved this one. I really like your poems. Keep on! So many lines got me thrilled, this was extreme, I loved it. " I was a worshiper of sunshine, a seeker of four-leaf clovers, a watcher of clouds’ amazingly changing formations, a wisher upon the fluff of dandelions." The clouds would be amazed how much we stare at them.
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Date: 3/9/2024 10:30:00 AM
A deep take on the contest and nice idea.. Good use of metaphors in the last stanza.. Best of luck in the contest..
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Date: 3/9/2024 12:13:00 PM
It was fun getting into this one. I know Charlotte usually prefers free verse and it is such a challenge to me but I tried.

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