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Beside the bar I nursed my drink, depression was my food, she entered like the World's first dawn and cut straight through my mood. Her dress a silky vortex, skirt was flowing, bodice tight, the flounce swayed with an ebb and flow like scarlet Northern lights. Looks crafted to bewilder, eyes dishonest, smile was kind, she knew that I was curious, and had somehow read my mind. Cocktail cherry on her lips, a prop to tantalize, I took the plunge, sat next to her and gazed into her eyes. A deep breath, with my fingers crossed, I asked “Are you alone?” Too late, I realised I'd stepped into her killing zone. A brief appraisal, up and down, and then she laughed out loud, which brought the curtain down on conversations in the crowd. Head down, red faced, I turned and walked a dignified retreat, to find a booth in shadow, where I meekly took a seat. This dark art she must practise, as she'd pulled off quite a coup to eviscerate my pride and ego, all in one fell swoop. Fallacious my long held belief, now well and truly sunk that I'm a real lady's man, but only when I'm drunk. For contest 'eight word challenge', sponsor John Hamilton 28th June 2018

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Date: 7/10/2018 10:59:00 PM
Excellently composed my friend
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Date: 7/10/2018 1:47:00 PM
Oh what a tale you've pulled me into! Though I see no woman able to send you off as such. Thanks for the ride Viv ;)
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Date: 7/9/2018 3:37:00 AM
Wow Viv....this is beyond good....it shines in the spolight your lines deserve...such as "the flounce swayed with an ebb and flow like scarlet Northern lights." You are a brilliant poet my friend! This is going into my faves! : ) I see why this garnered first place!
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Date: 7/3/2018 1:19:00 AM
G'day Viv … another hour or so Viv and you would have been in your element. You put your beer goggles on too early - brilliant Matey - Lindsay
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Date: 7/2/2018 1:52:00 PM
This is stacked with great phrases, Viv...:depression was my food," and "Cocktail cherry on her lips, a prop to tantalize,". Perfect example of, "Come into my web," said the spider to the fly. I felt sorry for the guy but happy for your 1st place. Well done.
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Date: 7/2/2018 1:46:00 PM
A wonderful poem, Viv! Congratulations on your Podium placement. Sandra
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:34:00 PM
Beautifully written and well crafted piece Viv. At least you had the courage to try, all be it liquid courage.
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:43:00 AM
raised a few chuckles - most enjoyable- and so well written. Reminded me of Anne Bishops's Black Jewels series. Good winner
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Date: 6/30/2018 7:51:00 AM
You do tell a story! Congratulations on your win with this cleverly written verse using the 8 words so effortlessly. Funny too. I so enjoyed this. :)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/1/2018 1:03:00 AM
Thanks Susan, I'm quite a catch :( . Viv x
Date: 6/29/2018 8:09:00 PM
oh wow, I hope this won becuase it is masterful, Viv. The woman is the femme fatale of MY poem, but in this case , your male character got off lucky. If she'd hooked up with him, his entire life would be in the dumps eventually!
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Date: 6/29/2018 8:09:00 PM
oh GOOD, I see you got a top placement. Congratulations.
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:04:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea, a nice surprise. Viv x
Date: 6/29/2018 6:43:00 PM
Masterful storytelling Viv...you should write short stories, this needs a part two. I actually had you 3rd in order but the system enters shared placement in random. Anyway, congrats on a shared first place! This is what I was looking for!
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:05:00 AM
Thanks, John, glad you liked it. Enjoyed your contest, as usual. regards, Viv
Date: 6/28/2018 2:44:00 PM
Viv.. one of the best poems I've read in many days. I will be back to study it. But the pleasure read was a pure delight!!!
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:05:00 AM
Thanks, Lyric, enjoyed the challenge. regards, Viv
Date: 6/28/2018 7:12:00 AM
Great job with this Viv, I agree with Harry...This one should be tough to beat. very funny and witty! Best of luck in the contest...Charlie
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:05:00 AM
Thanks Charles, it is nice to see it has gone down well. regards, Viv
Date: 6/28/2018 2:40:00 AM
Oh it would take a miracle poem to beat this Viv, what an awesome story, hope there is a part 2.
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:06:00 AM
Thanks Harry, very kind. Good fun composing it. regards, Viv
Date: 6/28/2018 2:27:00 AM
absolutely hilarious Mr Viv - I predict a top spot this is superb humour:-) hugs Jan (you need to go people watching in the pub far more often - tell your wife you are doing research for your poems lol) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:07:00 AM
I shall take that on board, Jan. Listen out for the slap- you will hear it all the way over there... Viv x
Date: 6/28/2018 1:59:00 AM
Haha Viv, who hasn't been down that road is telling porkies lol. And when the head clears you cringe. Until the next time ! Good luck. Tom
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:07:00 AM
There were lots of next times, Tom. Thanks for dropping by. Regards, Viv

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