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*Image of Childhood Memories by WordPress. On the Good Ship Bubble-Pop Bubbles, see-throughs, delicate floats, of voyaged sailless boats, her captain gauge the air around, blue cast where none e'er drown, farther distance -- misspoke, rising, shapeless bows devising, now turned admiral, sees her fleet, eyes rounded sterns complete, some sway starboard, others go port, she ventures drafts to sort, she waits till all had left her view, ere scuttling added crew, lifts her makeshift pier container, blows whistle, no-brainer, toneless wizardry expresses, anew fleet progresses, dreams to be, part of the magic, fit in spheres? a tough trick! 2021 September 23 *1st Place* rhyme me rhyme me a poem ~~Eve Roper: Judged 2021 October 05 *RZ checked Picture #2

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/7/2021 8:55:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a magical story/write. Have a blessed day with your win...............

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/7/2021 9:58:00 AM

Thank you, Paula, kind of you to say, and may your day be blessed as well, my friend, Aloha!

Jan Allison

Date: 10/6/2021 11:44:00 AM

Absolutely charming and i love the title too William, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/6/2021 3:11:00 PM

Words of good intents idle naught, for it, fairs a smile my friend, Aloha!

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 10/6/2021 12:31:00 AM

Great imagination and we can gloat away in one of the bubbles! congrats on your top win!!

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/6/2021 1:54:00 AM

Thanks my friend from yond breaks! Peace and joy always, Aloha!

Eve Roper

Date: 10/5/2021 7:58:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, William, great flow on a sea sail Bubble ship :). Hugs Eve

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/5/2021 11:26:00 PM

Glad you've enjoyed it, Eve, I made it to be right up your alley my friend! Aloha!

Gary Radice

Date: 9/29/2021 3:27:00 AM

A lovely poem William, enhanced by your reading. The Shirley Temple-esque title drew me in and I was captivated. I like how the poem is meant to be read almost in one breath; it gives a feeling of sharp movement to the ocean faring images and words. Cheers - Gary

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/29/2021 4:05:00 AM

Your thorough insightfulness is truly appreciated, Gary, and that your closing statement clearly validifies its intents, my friend. Peace, Aloha!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 9/26/2021 8:02:00 AM

You weave magic with your words William, again, beautifully created have a great day dear poet. :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/26/2021 9:42:00 AM

A second of joy fulfills one's whole day, Vienna, and I have you to be grateful for it my friend! Own the joy, Aloha!