On a Park Bench

On a park bench, the codger waits
left to ponder why he must hate
this man he loves whose gone astray
in the park, his young son once played
vacillating, he deflates

His gay son, he thought in dire straits
heavily, his worrying weights
from balderdash of youth today
On a park bench

The codger once loved to elate
or tell a joke of his create
but now the amusing displays
usurped by his deploring ways
fear not hate left to devastate 
On a park bench   


Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Seventh place in For Love of Language contest (Debbie Guzzi)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 4/2/2012 8:43:00 PM
congrats Rhonda on another great and glorious writ and win luv.. more amazing poetry u present..
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Date: 4/2/2012 11:15:00 AM
a distinct piece that deserves a stunning win, rhonda... wonderful!.. super congrats with huggs! :)
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Date: 4/2/2012 8:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest "For Love Of Language" Rhonda. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/20/2012 7:01:00 AM
Hey there! No I don't think you made a joke of the exercise at all..yet I don't think you need all of those words, the use of the word CODGER is great [gender-bender seems out of place with the man you are speaking of / that and the word lambasting I would let be either the main characters more common language or the observers/you/poets ..and for sure you have done a great job with the form and can remove your caps so it looks marvelous!! Light & Love [ps no need ever to place my name, yours or anything else on the bottom of your work..]
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Date: 3/18/2012 8:52:00 PM
WOW! Rhonda, this has been such a sit... .. have yourself a good night~ always*PD
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Date: 3/18/2012 11:39:00 AM
smooth and crisp images grace this page, rhonda... very creatively done with words that make the theme more compelling.. lots of luck and huggs!:)
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Date: 3/18/2012 11:37:00 AM
Well done Rhonda, good luck in the comp. x
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Date: 3/17/2012 11:33:00 PM
Those words she gave us sure make for some great creativity. Good luck in her contest. I will have to get my thinking cap on for this one.
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Date: 3/17/2012 9:07:00 PM
This is a well written poem. We see a lot of people sitting in park benches, but we never know Their thoughts or their stories. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla
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