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Jagged fragments of a puerile chorus compose my fledgling thoughts. Each shrill shard impales my soul with piercing slivers of childish inflections. Looped refrains of callow mantras whorl my mind in endless rounds. tantrumed harmonies, sung upon a splintered stage… my inner children

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Date: 12/6/2016 8:51:00 PM
Well done David!! Nice work. Big congrats on your win Brian's contest. Big Hugggs. Cap'n Deb
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Date: 11/28/2015 3:14:00 PM
David:) A nice and creative win. Love SKAT
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Date: 11/27/2015 8:24:00 PM
Too short...because it was too good David! Congratulations on your win! I loved it! #7
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Date: 11/27/2015 11:00:00 AM
Beautiful, David. I wish there were more! Congrats on your win.
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Date: 11/26/2015 9:39:00 PM
Wonderful pen david.. congrats on big win!
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Date: 11/26/2015 3:13:00 PM
David, this is such a unique haibun. Your prose is SO poetic. I found myself re-reading this one several times. Such an interesting haiku! Congrats :)
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Date: 11/26/2015 7:46:00 AM
a really interesting, intriguing one here; excellent writing, very poetic prose...i'm not usually keen on very short haibuns, but this one completely captivated me - congrats on your win in my contest!
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Date: 11/13/2015 1:22:00 PM
Excellent, David! Even the prose section of this haibun is very poetic. #7 Regards // paul
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Date: 11/10/2015 12:59:00 AM
your senses are truly alive in this wonderful piece,david..how are you?. huggs
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