October Feast of Winds

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Hurricane rages in Caribbean Sea 2016

I hear the heavy breathing through my trees And Acorns angering the rooftop slate Whilst winds invade the Caribbean seas The hurricane metes out the islands’ fate The sunlight plays on sturdy trunks of day And limbs, they wave, with friendly Southern charm Whilst clouds do heighten the fear on display The cataclysm of the seas does harm I see the tickle of the Autumn leaves The feast of nuts below my cushioned feet Whilst anchored palms are torn apart by thieves As lions roar, the land declares defeat 2nd place winner A poem written in iambic pentameter 10/6/2016

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/18/2016 10:42:00 AM

Wonderful work in the winners' list..Way to go..Congrats on your placement..Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/18/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thank you, Sara!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/18/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thank you, Sara!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/16/2016 4:09:00 PM

Very interesting poem, with the contrast, and it flows beautifully as if it was effortless. Congrats, Kim. Agnes

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/16/2016 7:29:00 PM

Thank you, Agnes! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/16/2016 7:29:00 PM

Thank you, Agnes! :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/16/2016 10:46:00 AM

An amazing contrast of October winds, Kim...the expected winds with falling acorns and leaves of 'Southern' charm...and those raging out at sea. As I read it, I was thinking about Hurrican Matthew...disaster in Haiti...compared to our US coast. Well-done and congratulation on your placement!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/16/2016 7:28:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra! Exactly what I was writing about.