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Turbulent moves the water mass Thumping and roaring as it rolls, Sheltering in her, myriad strange beings From tiny planktons to giant killer whales Constant remains she, yet changing ever The puzzling paradox beyond the land She had cradled the first mote of life Earliest link in the incessant chain of life Whipped by the wind, smashed by the storm She lashes on the rock in angry venom In tumult she pounds the strand As though her fury is never assuaged At times seen sedate in shades of blue So compliant - without stir, without din Tranquil she lies – an appeased child With a calm unmatched in her prior demeanor Beneath the lull and hum of waves Brews an eternal clash that never dies The ceaseless fracas oft swelling out Into a bedlam of commotion, clatter and din Curious shapes with needles, spikes and spines Sticking out in clusters beneath the blue The fantasy world of coral reefs Chiseled and shaped - Nature’s unique masonry! Marvel of marvels, this mystic mass With tiny droplets grown into scores Billions multiplied into trillion fold This infinite expanse that wobbles and churns What ingenious brain did frame Such a wonder as this mighty ocean? What furtive hands did hide Such baffling mysteries in this briny deep? ______________________________ March .26.2023 ~ Placed Fourth~ Brian Strand Premiere Contest ~ Placed First~ Writing Challenge ‘O’ Words Poetry Contest Sponsor – Constance La France Topic chosen- Ocean

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Date: 3/27/2023 10:37:00 AM
- Back with a congratulations, Valsa :) - hugs
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Date: 3/26/2023 9:08:00 PM
You took me on a scuba diving tour that will last in my memory. You have captured every form of beauty in the ocean netted it and and hauled it ashore to delight your readers. I am so impressed. Congrats on a wonderful "fishy" poem my dear Valsa.
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Date: 3/26/2023 7:55:00 PM
Back with heartfelt congratulations on your contest top win, dear Valsa. I already predicted this for your poem amply deserve it.
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Date: 3/26/2023 4:48:00 PM
A wonderful poem, Valsa!..."the fantasy world of coral reefs, chiseled and shaped - nature's unique masonry..." The ocean would love your descriptions. :) Congratulations!
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Date: 3/26/2023 1:22:00 PM
The mysteries of the depths - I love it Valsa. There is so much we do not know. Congratulations on your win!:)
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Date: 3/26/2023 12:43:00 PM
Valsa, congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge 'O' Words with your beautiful poem. I like your image too, blessings, Constance
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Date: 3/26/2023 7:52:00 PM
Thanks a lot Constance for picking up my poem for a win.
Date: 3/26/2023 6:04:00 AM
Beneath the lull and hum of waves Brews an eternal clash that never dies The ceaseless fracas oft swelling out Into a bedlam of commotion, clatter and din.. splendid vocabulary throughout your poem, Valsa. Highly descriptive write that brings forth the ocean in readers' view. A FAVE!
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Date: 3/26/2023 4:05:00 AM
Marvel of marvels, this mystic mass With tiny droplets grown into scores, Such baffling mysteries in this briny deep? Valsa, you have done an excellent job capturing the essence of the ocean in your words. Wonderful metaphors crafted via exquisite top-caliber diction. Good luck with the contest
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Date: 3/26/2023 3:12:00 AM
- A wonderful picture created with your words, Valsa :) - best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 3/26/2023 12:12:00 AM
Truly wonderful! Exceptional
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Date: 3/25/2023 11:30:00 PM
Brilliant writing Valsa, you captured the character of the ocean so well. Hope you're keeping well and good luck in the contest. Tom
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