Obscurity

layers of fog blanket the bayou obscuring vision the pungency of decay assaults my senses 3/17/15 For Andrea's Tanka 2 contest 6th place

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Valerie Staton

Date: 5/9/2015 6:28:00 AM

Nicely done! Wonderful imagery.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 3/29/2015 4:51:00 AM

This is definitely a tanka that made me wonder upon reading the last 2 lines-- shrouded with mystery with what could be decaying, and why? Corpses maybe? Of whom and what causes? A very intriguing and eerie write, congrats on your win!

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 10:29:00 AM

Your appeal to the senses is apparent in a most striking and positive way, Kim. Lovely Tanka #7...and congrats on a very worthy win. // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:56:00 PM

KIM, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:28:00 PM

Some great images of sight and smell here. Congrats for your win, Kim.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/18/2015 9:41:00 PM

Wow, you have created a foggy image and a powerful thought of what's unseen! Best wishes in Andrea's contest...hugs, Rhonda

Kim Merryman
Date: 3/21/2015 7:49:00 PM

Thank you, Rhonda, for your encouraging words!

Kim Shaw

Date: 3/18/2015 8:34:00 PM

Hi Kim! I really enjoyed this very unique Tanka. Very well done! Good luck with the contest. Hugs, Kimberly xx

Kim Merryman
Date: 3/21/2015 7:47:00 PM

Thank you, Kimberly. I'm glad you liked it!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/18/2015 8:04:00 PM

Kim, You took this Tanka into a place of mystery and I loved it! I hope Andrea will too! 7

Kim Merryman
Date: 3/18/2015 8:13:00 PM

Thank you, Connie! I'm glad you liked it!

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/18/2015 9:40:00 AM

A very nice Tanka, Kim. Great imagery and definitely an emotional turn in the last two lines. Best wishes for the contest. Sandra

Kim Merryman
Date: 3/18/2015 8:07:00 PM

Sorry about that, Sandra. I hit the wrong reply button when responding to Sara. Thank you for your encouraging comment. I appreciate it!

Kim Merryman
Date: 3/18/2015 8:05:00 PM

Thank you, Sara! We don't have a paper mill near here so it smells more swampy.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/18/2015 7:01:00 AM

Enjoyed reading this one today..Good descriptive work..I wonder does the bayou have the swamp or paper mill scent of the swamp and coast here?..Thanks for the visit..Sara

Kim Merryman
Date: 3/18/2015 8:10:00 PM

I accidently posted my reply to you under Sandra's comment. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Sara. We don't have a paper mill nearby so it smells more swampy.