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O' Shepherdess Fair!

O’ Fair shepherdess! What a misery swept! A lover, a selfless lover you have lost Why don’t you speak? You haven’t yet wept. Thus the shepherdess replied, “It’s not my fault” His death hasn’t moved you, shame! You are unmoved by the loss of your lover You treat him as if he were a stranger Thus she replied, “I am not to blame “ “Yes, not his love but I grieve him aloof He had shared so many other lasses They would be sharing the same feelings Unfortunately,” I have no proof” “Ask any shepherdess around any lane He loved far and wide, suffice it to say. Of his unfaithfulness, I drove him away Therefore," I will show no shame”. ============================= Honorable Mention Contest: Four sentences

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Date: 6/27/2010 5:05:00 PM
hmmmm...good win but I hope not self portrsit? :) Light & Love
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Date: 6/26/2010 8:22:00 AM
What a very unique take on those 4 sentences, Dr. Ram--I really enjoyed the story involved here--I could just imagine it quite vividly too--congrats on your win with this --nikko :)
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Date: 6/25/2010 4:47:00 AM
congratulations on your win dr. cheers oscar
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Date: 6/24/2010 5:21:00 AM
Congratulations DR on your win in Paula Swanson's contest "Four Sentences". Love, Carol
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Date: 6/22/2010 9:18:00 PM
Congrats on your HM Dr Ram. Nice going. ...Ralph
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Date: 6/22/2010 7:38:00 PM
I really liked this, Dr. Ram. Congrats on the HM. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 6/21/2010 12:01:00 PM
very intriquing write my good man. i enjoyed it. great use of words.
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Date: 6/21/2010 7:35:00 AM
Just Wonderful,hope i find mre time to read mre of your gems here!Celene!
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Date: 6/21/2010 7:05:00 AM
wow.. Dr R. wonderful write with such a great word usage and flow. Michael
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Date: 6/21/2010 4:25:00 AM
Awesome write DRM, Great entry and a winner in my voice! Best Jeralynn
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Date: 6/21/2010 3:26:00 AM
Excellent poem, Dr. Ram. Good luck in the contest and thank you for all your kind comments...Gert
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Date: 6/21/2010 2:06:00 AM
awesome poem, one of the best i've read in poetry soup, thanks for your comments on my writing also harry
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Date: 6/20/2010 7:11:00 PM
Creative way to approach the contest! Interesting use of conversation to bring this poem to life. Best wishes in the contest. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen
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Date: 6/20/2010 6:59:00 PM
My heart goes out to this shepherdess, Dr. Ram. When she's says she has "no proof," however, I wonder if she may have been fed lies by other lasses who were jealous. Excellent story in rhyme! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/20/2010 6:19:00 PM
Good Luck in the contest. God Bless Phyl
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Date: 6/20/2010 5:46:00 PM
great story, enjoyed, thanks for reading my work!
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Date: 6/20/2010 5:27:00 PM
Very nice-Good luck in the contest!~Tirzah~
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