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Poetry Contest "Give me a Ghazal" Entry No Other Way Out So very still eyes cast inch by inch, still afraid of what's to come. Not knowing how you got into this pinch, still afraid of what's to come... Pondering your reflective time used to unbetter life. A stone turns, a branch breaks, sudden flinch, still afraid of what's to come... If only you were a good boy, a very, very good, good boy. Your heart might breathe as your lungs unclench, still afraid of what's to come... Saddened by your inability to stop the war in your head. Thinking thoughts of the right way to lynch, still afraid of what's to come... That's it, ending it, tie the knots like Michael's perfect braided noose. Around the neck, standing chair, drop, cinch, still afraid of what's to come?...

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Date: 8/4/2016 5:22:00 PM
Very nice....
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Date: 3/29/2016 4:59:00 PM
Hi Brian, Congratulations on your win in the contest.,,,Vlad.
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/29/2016 5:13:00 PM
Thank you so much Vlad
Date: 3/28/2016 1:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Brian:)
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/29/2016 5:12:00 PM
Thank you so much
Date: 3/27/2016 9:42:00 AM
Happy Easter, Brian, congratulations on your win... Love Linda
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/27/2016 4:56:00 PM
Thank you so much Linda and a very Happy Easter to you too!
Date: 3/27/2016 9:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement, Brian. Well done for this contest.
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/27/2016 4:56:00 PM
Thank you Lin
Date: 3/27/2016 8:45:00 AM
Bravo for writing about a subject that many fear to tackle - great poem Brian:-) hugs Jan xx
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/27/2016 4:55:00 PM
Thank you so much Jan I am glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 3/27/2016 8:11:00 AM
Intense write Brian, fear is a driving emotion that leads us to make choices that are sometimes hasty and have irreversible consequences.
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/27/2016 4:55:00 PM
so true my friend thank you for your comments they are much appreciated
Date: 3/26/2016 11:45:00 PM
This was powerful stuff, Brian! You surprised me in the end with the build up, and the added question mark in your refrain ... the lingering doubts, mixed with the self will to do something so drastic. You captivate with the despair of it all ... congrats!
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/27/2016 1:55:00 AM
Thank you very much Timothy I am honored at my placement and that you thought so highly of it. I enjoyed your contest very much!
Date: 3/12/2016 7:55:00 PM
This piece is very good Brian but it is a little unsettling, or disturbing perhaps but I guess that is your element now isn't it. Great job I am sure this will place well.
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/13/2016 7:31:00 AM
Suicide is a disturbing topic but it doesn't mean we should ignore it right? Thankyou for reading

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