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No More Air

I sat next to you where you decided to perish. My eyes were dry yet my heart was weeping in lament. You took your own life, and I wanted to take mine as well. Visions of you lying there so l i f e l e s s... eyes OPEN, heart not beating- CLOSED them and said... goodbye. Your hands so cold and d e c a y i n g from the cold winter days, my grief trying to warm yours with my heated b l e e d i n g tears- I try to wake you from your sleep; my mind knows what my heart fears, I lie next to you in TORMENT…take your pills and die the same way. Lifeless without you- Your death my sheer salvation- I wish to d e c a y with you by my mournful side- Hands held- BREATHING... no more air... Challenge - Write One - Poetry Contest Sponsor, Broken Wings Date Written: August 30, 2016

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James Inman

Date: 9/16/2016 1:21:00 PM

Sad Romeo and Juliet quality. Very nice write Laura.

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/9/2016 3:30:00 PM

Such deep pain felt in your words, Laura, and your loss and sorrow is heartbreaking. Congratulations on your First Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser

Date: 9/9/2016 2:14:00 PM

This poem is very moving, I can feel the anguish! Congrats on your top win, Laura Loo!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:44:00 PM

thank you sweet Laura :)-luloo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/9/2016 1:23:00 PM

A 7 for this heart-wrenching WINNING poem, Luloo. Janice

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:44:00 PM

thank you lovely Janice :)-luloo

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/9/2016 1:10:00 PM

Holding my breath with this excellent poem! Congrats, Luloo!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:43:00 PM

thank you lovely Kim :)-luloo

Constance La France

Date: 9/9/2016 10:52:00 AM

Laura, congratulations on your win in my contest with this sad and beautifully penned poem and I love the layout too!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:43:00 PM

many thanks for my placement Broken Wings, I am grateful you found it winning worthy :) be blessed :)-luloo

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 9/9/2016 10:15:00 AM

So sad, Laura.Loved your depiction of the pain and hurt.Congrats on your win!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:42:00 PM

thank you sweet Sara :)-luloo

Anu Nayak

Date: 9/9/2016 9:46:00 AM

Dear Laura, so sad this poem is.....utter grief...pain.... so touching..hearty congrats on your bright win with First place well deserved !!! love Anu:)

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:42:00 PM

thank you sweet Anulaxmi :)-luloo

Paul Callus

Date: 9/9/2016 9:36:00 AM

Glad that this is pure fiction, Laura! Can't imagine you drowning in sadness:) A truly beautiful entry, and worthy of placing first...congratulations!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:41:00 PM

Actually partly fiction. My sister took her own life in the winter of 2011. Although that part is true, I DO NOT wish to take mine as well like she did. So partly fiction. thanks Paul :)-luloo

Laura Hay

Date: 9/9/2016 9:22:00 AM

I love the line, my mind knows what my heart fears, i hope this wasnt written from experience, such a sad poem, but very well done, congrats, Laura.

Lu Loo
Date: 9/9/2016 2:40:00 PM

thank you Laura, actually yes my sister took her own life and was found outside in the winter in 2011. Although that is true, I DO NOT wish to die the same way :)-luloo