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Nirvana

I hover above myself mentally pacing the dark in pursuit of the absurd while day turns to golden haze Swallows flit like darting flames flowers a scatter of paint pond waters mirror the sky tinted in rainbow colors I will the wind to be still a frisson of awareness obliterates fretfulness death and life just whimsical Is such bliss mere shattered silk or am I in Nirvana. @jjote 0905/2015

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Leon Enriquez

Date: 9/6/2015 3:51:00 AM

Dear Josefina: If this is your 1st time writing a sonnet, then I think you've done remarkably well. Write a few more to really develop your own style. In your poem " Nirvana", you don't really need the full-stops. Just let them run on. BTW, I forgot to tell you that after you finish writing your 3 quatrains and 1 couplet, you should put them together with no spaces for the 14 lines. Leon

Josefina Costales
Date: 9/6/2015 6:55:00 AM

Thanks again Leon, you are so helpful. So I edited the poem as above, no stops, all lines together...:)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/5/2015 11:37:00 AM

- I agree with, S.O. .... a lovely sonnet, Josefina :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Josefina Costales
Date: 9/5/2015 6:09:00 PM

thanks Anne-Lise for stopping by