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Next door was a paddock of long grass and a graveyard for dumped machinery. Rusted out boilers, cogs, wheels and huge presses were piled high and begged for the sure foot of a boy to climb and boast the height. Strange, twisted shapes held a pose that seemed to freeze the agony of being broken apart. Sinews of wire cable hung from joints in frayed strands as if torn out of sockets. Grease oozed from cracks like congealed blood. Nothing seemed to fit a species familiar to a boy, each part a mystery as to what beast it belonged. There were holes big enough too fit a head, throated cavities that harbored unknown echoes and pipes that would hold a haunting note when struck with a stick. One afternoon on coming home from school, there was nothing left but a cleared block. Everything had been carted away. A workman told my Mum that snakes had crawled out of the place where I used to play.

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Date: 11/15/2023 11:02:00 AM
One man's (boy's) treasure is another man's junk. Funny how our perspective changes as we age
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Paul Willason
Date: 11/15/2023 7:39:00 PM
Indeed it does Tom. Childhood is often filled with stuff that would be classified as rubbish....fortunately something magical happens in the way imagination and vision is coupled in the mind of a child...thanks for your comments Tom. Regards, Paul
Date: 11/14/2023 7:46:00 AM
Came back to re-read and enjoyed how my mind flitted from past to post apocalyptic both with a haze around them. The inclusion of the sound made if struck with a stick rings in my ears too. Well written - I'm becoming fascinated with the line breaks, which are stylistically yours and create a voice in my head which uses breath in a very measured reassuring way.
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Paul Willason
Date: 11/15/2023 7:34:00 PM
Most of my poems have a certain rhythm very much determined by line breaks and the actual sound of words...important part...so, well spotted. The poems are a notch or two above normal speech rhythms, in other words slightly elevated in tone. You can pack more emotional content into the line this way...at least in my view. Many thanks DD for your allowing your ear to pick up the cadence....
Date: 11/14/2023 6:41:00 AM
This reminds me of an early poem I wrote entitled, "The Tombstone" I enjoyed this because of the reference to little boys and their imaginations. Another fine poem, Paul.
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Paul Willason
Date: 11/15/2023 7:23:00 PM
The landscapes of childhood remain with us...become personal totems of our history. How a child's imagination furnishes the ordinary with such intensity. Thanks Daniel
Date: 11/14/2023 4:13:00 AM
Fascinating - I'll return to this one. It needs to be re-read
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