New Life

I felt your heartbeat you warmed my bitter heart, by giving me summer You were my rainbow After a big thunder storm Your love made me whole I think it was you, My sweet and beautiful child Who gave me new life Alexis Y. 07-22-16 Inspired by the Choka contest. Author's note- I have know clue if It's correct.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/27/2016 5:08:00 PM

Ahh!! Enjoyed reading this one today..If it was entered in the contest, reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Just James

Date: 7/26/2016 1:55:00 PM

Wow this is wonderful!! Well done!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/25/2016 12:47:00 AM

This poem is warm and beautiful as is a new born child. A lovely Choka Alexis! 7 ; )

Paul Callus

Date: 7/24/2016 4:51:00 PM

You have been well inspired, Alexis. The 5-7-5 syllable count is correct. I have a feeling that you did not enter this one for the contest, otherwise I would have expected to see it on the winners' list! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/23/2016 10:36:00 AM

Yes, I would say you did it right, since the syllable count is able to be either 5 7 7 or 5 7 5. I did mine the longer way. The topic you write of is precious!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/23/2016 9:40:00 AM

What a wonderful new life.

Probir Gupta

Date: 7/23/2016 5:57:00 AM

A lovely Choka ... Very well written ...

Jan Allison

Date: 7/22/2016 1:01:00 PM

As a parent I can relate to this so much especially the final stanza which brought a lump to my throat. :-) hugs Jan xx