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July. 25.2023
Writing Challenge 'N' Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France
Placed First
 
A story poem

 

"When God given gift is mistaken as self earned power, people become arrogant and arrogance leads to fall" By Poet.
The crow we see, was once a beautiful bird Sweet as a lark and white as a swan The world stood in rapturous glee As he poured out melodies with such elan Proud and haughty over his gorgeous form He reckoned himself to be the crown of creation To all other birds he was a cynosure of charm And he feasted on their praises of mad veneration Presumptuously dwelling on altitudes high He thought the world was revolving round him Looking at others with contempt and disdain He wanted everyone to dance to his whim At morn when other birds twittered and chirped And sang devotional lays in praise of God, The crow refused to sing any song As he deemed himself to be far above the Lord God wanted to teach the arrogant bird a lesson A messenger with warning from Heaven was sent ‘Unless you turn humble and with respect others treat God’s wrath will fall and you shall lament’ Sneering at this and rebuking the terrestrial envoy, With haughty arrogance, the crow went his way. By dusk, he flew down to perch on a tree Alas, the branch gave way to his utter dismay! Losing balance, he slid down into a can of tar Disappointed was he as he emerged all black But hoped that a dip in water would wash away the dirt And once more he would be, to his former self back Soon God’s messenger with ire reappeared in a vision This time, stark were his words of admonition ‘Henceforth you and your progeny will all be black Ugly in appearance, scavengers you shall be known! ‘In place of the tuneful melody, you were blessed Your sound will be sonorous and rough’ Saying this, the apparition vanished out of sight And the crow knew his life ahead would be tough He waited impatient for the dawn to break Before all other birds were up and awake He decided to try and test his sound And was startled at what came in the wake “Caw…. Caw…. Spurted the sound from his beak Jarring and raucous, harsh and husky! While other birds laughed over and celebrated his fall The poor defeated crow was left grouchy and dusky

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Date: 7/27/2023 1:31:00 PM
I don't know if this is original or from an ancestor who passed this story along, but I am glad you put it in poetic form. Thank you for sharing this delightful story with a moral touch in it. I appreciate all the visits to my page. Sara
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Date: 7/27/2023 1:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a write/quote. Love It. Our power comes from God. Have a great day.....................
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Date: 7/26/2023 12:13:00 AM
A beautiful tale or myth, I have never read or heard so far. All the same, very meaningly. Very beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/25/2023 6:56:00 PM
Someone famous once said, 'Pride goeth before the Fall.' Point well-amplified by Valsa George here!! :)
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Date: 7/25/2023 1:52:00 PM
Well told Valsa; not to say he was not warned. Generally, when going astray, each of us gets many warning (and graces) -- till all that are left are stone hearts and stone faces. We attract what we are. Blessings my friend. Outstanding writing.
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Date: 7/25/2023 9:33:00 AM
A wonderful story Valsa. Really enjoyed it.
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Date: 7/25/2023 5:30:00 AM
Brilliant story telling, Valsa. Your creativity shines as you convey a meaningful lesson the bird learned. No doubt a winning poem you wrote.
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Date: 7/25/2023 2:14:00 AM
What a wonderful story, Valsa, reminded me of someone called Lucifer..
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