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Naked Subjugation

Last night I wandered past your total disregard And walked forlorn Stark insecurity amplified Still I walked , my usual forebearance uncomplied Upon furthermost the distance between us elongated The sustenance of forgotten stores inside me generated I was venerated - nay subjugated Of these morsels congregated And fed me through those inkblack nights In dewfall of the quiet Inside unheard the rebel riots As my breath became a billion As my fears that I embraced Loosed themselves and fearing fled Melting in the murky bellows Did I find my standing there... Naked but for meekness laced Forgotten was my fear I needs you dId not anymore Nor your disregard this doggone day Not dejected as before Only sin has me surrounded And soon encircled dissappears,decays Unclothed in limped insignificance Nothing said ... So still your body lies

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Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/14/2017 9:09:00 AM

I am totally in love with the first line. It was difficult falling in love with it because this write is loaded with awesome lines, lines all worth pausing over. But, Jannie, I fear I must steal the first line, would that be okay? The word use in this write is amazing, as is its feel. Hugs ... CayCay

Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/14/2017 1:15:00 PM

Hugs received. You may steal the first line as you did my heart the first time .Its my favorite too. Again my gratitude

Sona Wilae

Date: 9/28/2017 11:13:00 PM

This work so depicts my bouts with depression. Thank you for revelation.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/29/2017 1:18:00 AM

Wow Hello Sona. Welcome over here. This poem is half the story. On the other side there is joy to be found . My hope for you

Robert Warlov

Date: 6/6/2017 12:24:00 PM

"Inkblack" dark indeed, but I detect too, a faith in your own strength to overcome. Recognising the demon, I think, is half the battle.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 6/6/2017 12:36:00 PM

I only just posted a "hello" to your other comment. Somehow I think you really like my poems because youre always there. I really dig that Robert. High time you put a face on that avatar. Thank you so much my buddy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/10/2017 6:55:00 PM

Jannie, some of the imagery in this poem is so unique. Very poetic whether iambic or not!

Jannie Breedt
Date: 5/10/2017 7:00:00 PM

Amazing woman you are Thank you again

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/28/2017 8:48:00 PM

Jannie, a beautiful poem you wrote I enjoyed this poem A 7 nice to meet you.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/29/2017 2:19:00 AM

Ditto Darlene, thank you so very much. I already went to your site also

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 4/28/2017 4:01:00 PM

Oh, your beautiful mind unveiled once again, Jannie. Extraordinary poetry ... so deep and reflective. Very powerful imagery and expressions. Scintillating work, my friend. Love always.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/29/2017 2:20:00 AM

Oh Freddie what a joy again. Thank you

Akkina Downing

Date: 4/18/2017 4:35:00 PM

Fantastic piece! Congratulation on potd :)

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/29/2017 2:23:00 AM

Hello Akkina. Thank you.

John Bertin

Date: 4/18/2017 1:00:00 PM

Congratuations, superb poem!

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 1:54:00 PM

Ty John . I will also go to your poems soon. Blessings

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/18/2017 12:54:00 PM

- Congratulations on your well deserved p.o.t.d. - So glad I found this here, a awesome write, Jannie - 7 - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 1:53:00 PM

O Anne lise I am so happy and humbled. You people are ao amazing. This is such a grand feeling to be part of something so spectacular. I live for Poetry Soup and my dearest friends i made here. Thank you

Tim Smith

Date: 4/18/2017 10:46:00 AM

A tremendous piece Jannie...I see why it made POTD... Congratulations

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 10:50:00 AM

Hey Tim, the more I practise the luckier I get.I will amble over to your site as well. Thank you

Maria Williams

Date: 4/18/2017 7:35:00 AM

Congrats on POTD Jannie. Indeed once one crosses the invisible threshold of fear,as your poem so aptly point out, the world opens up. A super 7+

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 8:53:00 AM

And hi to you also Maria. I will come peep your show too. Thank you so much

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/18/2017 7:07:00 AM

Fantastic write Jannie, congrats on potd :) xomo!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/18/2017 11:58:00 AM

Heh heh yeah, tried to once, need my hubby's computer and his help, I'm on a need to know basis with computers and soon forget ;)

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 8:55:00 AM

Hi Maureen I have seen your name pop up everywhere. Its time you post your avatar. I off course will reciprocate your esteemed visit

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 8:52:00 AM

Hi Maureen I have seen your name pop up everywhere. Its time you post your avatar. I off course will reciprocate your esteemed visit

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/18/2017 7:00:00 AM

Great multilayered poem that begs to be re-read over and over. Congrats on POTD, Jannie. I don't think I've ever read any of your work, so I'm off to check out your page.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 8:49:00 AM

Hi Agnes, As I did too with your poem which you sang and piano accompaniment I forgot the title but it was a haunting hymn Thanks for checking me out

Charlie Smith

Date: 4/18/2017 6:51:00 AM

Perfect title Jannie, you had me before Read the first line. The last three lines of the second verse are incredible. Congratulations for POTD honors, so very well deserved...

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 8:46:00 AM

Thank you thank you thank you Charlie

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/18/2017 3:15:00 AM

"And fed me through those inkblack nights In dewfall of the quiet Inside unheard the rebel riot" What awesome lines! This poem is very deserving of the honor of receiving POTD! Congratulations my friend! 7 ; ) a Fave!

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 4:54:00 AM

Ooo God bless all you people that I now call my Poetry Soup friends. I am elated. Thanks Connie

Elizabeth Kinch

Date: 4/18/2017 3:03:00 AM

Congratulations, this is an awesome write and going in my favorites.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 4:55:00 AM

Thank you Elizabeth. I will respond in kind

Darren White

Date: 4/18/2017 2:55:00 AM

That first line is simply gorgeous.... Your poem is so introspective, in an almost understandable, still somewhat abstract way. And those final two lines say it all, very compact. I love this poem very much. Congratulations on PotD

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 4:56:00 AM

When I see that little penguin I know you have been there. Thanks Darren

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/18/2017 2:40:00 AM

Awesome work, Jannie, as always - I always receive some sort of reward with every piece of yours that I read - joy, introspection, questioning, spiritual pique - this is wonderful, with many layers and rhythms. Well-chosen for POD, and well-deserved! Blessings, my friend. :-)

Bernard F. Asuncion

Date: 4/18/2017 1:57:00 AM

Enjoyed reading this well-written poem... congrats on being chosen....

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 2:00:00 AM

Hi Bernard. Thank you for your comment. I am not sure for what I was chosen though

Jannie Breedt

Date: 4/18/2017 1:10:00 AM

Hey Seeker you totally bring it together towards the end. I concur withe other comments. This is a unique and a fresh take on an epic. I find myself dreaming awaý at that corner table of yours.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 4/18/2017 1:12:00 AM

I dunno how this landed here....