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Naked Before Me

I see you with her and I know from your eyes your vision whirled You hold her hand and when our gaze met you unclasp it No need to hide honey I know we expired I thought at first Time would make us wine But it just turned us into a fluid in the mouth Fermented from sleep sour, smelly, unswallowable Your ways of loving were exposed before me When our gaze locked, Don't bow your head yet- I'm still recollecting it How sweet you love Rather how sweet you lie? The way you thawed my heart by the heat of your tongue and now I prove that tongue's no better than a snake's and Oh! how sensational you love You always sent me screaming through the night But don't be ashamed honey if your skill is naked before me Cause I know for certain That the lady whom you're with Will fall to no better than my fate.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 10/17/2010 8:49:00 PM
Hmmm, am I getting this right? the lady left you for another woman? Very interesting this one!! I love how unique some of your lines come off, such as the way you describe time turning you both into a nasty fluid instead of wine! I hope I can still find at least one other poem of yours I have not read yet! this one was great. Andrea
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Date: 7/22/2010 1:49:00 PM
Ow now i see,i have read this already,oops :)sooory!
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Date: 7/22/2010 1:47:00 PM
Interesting!missed this one!CELENE!
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Date: 6/25/2010 11:26:00 AM
Not what I expected when I read the title, but what a fun way to portray a betrayer. I enjoyed it very much. Sasha
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Date: 6/22/2010 1:15:00 PM
stopping by to say thank you for your comment, on my given slam, have anice one,..p.d.
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Date: 6/21/2010 12:17:00 AM
ah the complications of love... great write though.
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Date: 6/19/2010 7:26:00 AM
Betrayal!touching deep poem Juan!Celene
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Date: 6/19/2010 5:59:00 AM
Another great write... keep them comming my friend.... Michael
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Date: 5/5/2010 10:37:00 PM
thanks for all your comments, you are too kind thanks for the support on my poems,..p.d.
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Date: 5/1/2010 5:36:00 AM
this is quite the piece to share with someone, when they need to understand how it is,..p.d.
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Date: 4/30/2010 10:00:00 PM
such strong words for a betrayed heart. Sends a powerful meaning to the heart. -Stacie
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