Mystic

I venture forth in this wood unknown Trembling inside this greenery overgrown I trustingly advance each step foreward Inching towards my fate unguarded Lowering my gaze somewhat subdued I spy my rainbow my future I view Longing future wisdom spiralling notions My lusty prelude to imagination enthrown!

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Chitra Lakhera

Date: 10/11/2008 6:49:00 AM

Each line was so majestic. Wonderful write Fathima.Ah we all wish that, don't we? Love, Chitra

Patrick Wakefield

Date: 10/11/2008 3:25:00 AM

Let the images be clue to the idea you are trying to convey. The point of metaphor is to not tell your reader what you mean. If that's what you were going for.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 10/11/2008 3:23:00 AM

I love this poem and the line I spy my rainbow my future I view. This is very well written. I am longing future wisdom so that I can know the paths to take in life. Nice work.