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My Waning Years As my waning years return me to reverie I dream about the days we spent with sylvan trees As sunset casts its golden glow on canopies And you and I thought our love would last eternally. Love had us mesmerized under its magic spell Our youth's enchanted vision of what life would be Innocent intentions that let our lives feel free Enraptured in each others arms as twilight fell. As we lay amidst colored leaves that autumn day, Those sweet memories still so vivid in my mind; Your handsome face, your softest lips that I would find When pressed against my lips caused me to pray. Grateful, I thanked the Lord for serendipity. That we would find each other in a world so great And feel electric sparks at first glance to be fate Two souls with similar affinity. I thought that we would forever have binding ties. You hid a fearsome temper you could not rein. With my fear of violence I could not contain, We sadly parted ways with heartbreakng goodbyes. As my waning years return me to reverie I dream about the days we spent with sylvan trees As sunset casts its golden glow on canopies And you and I thought our love would last eternally. 9-18-18 Enclosed Rhyme - September, 2018 Poetry Contest Sponsor Dear Heart~Fourth Place~

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Date: 11/16/2018 9:52:00 PM
A sensual complex and touching personal tale, made all the more appealing with its undertone of beautiful heartfelt appreciation but sadness. Very impressive, Connie.
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Date: 11/16/2018 1:51:00 PM
This is so tender and endearing. I picked it because you had commenting on my poem of similar mein... We are young and then we are old - all in a heartbeat. Very good writing that touched my old heart! this is so tender
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 11/16/2018 2:26:00 PM
I have read through several of your poems this morning and I realize we have much in common. It is lovely to meet a kindred spirit. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. I adored your poem about elephants. I wrote a tiny poem titled Elephant...that has the cutest elephant pictures ever posted with it. Check it out when you have time.Thank you for your lovely comment Sherry. xxoo : )
Date: 10/8/2018 6:38:00 PM
Hi Connie, congratulations for your win in the contest with this excellent write. It read as a winner. You place us in the emotional heart of your words, your memories and we feel the emotion that sings from your words. This write touches the heartstrings and sings into the soul. The visions come so easy to the mind through your gentle words. This is such a wonderful write. It has to be a fave. have a wonderful Tuesday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/8/2018 6:58:00 PM
Awww thank you so much Mike. This one was close to my heart. I really appreciate the fave. Blessings, Connie
Date: 10/8/2018 12:17:00 PM
Hello Connie, Congratulations on your contest win with this most marvelous rhyme!! The craftsmanship of your Enclosed Rhyme is most excellent. Full of emotion and a palpable sense of sweet passion, this one literally pulled at my heartstrings every time I re-read it. "My Waning Years," for me, was a real treat to read. Superb!! A FAVE TOO!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/8/2018 12:44:00 PM
Wow, thank you so much Gary. Past experience makes for realistic poetry. I truly appreciate the fave and your lovely comment my friend. : )
Date: 10/2/2018 3:15:00 PM
Connie, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem ~
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/3/2018 1:59:00 AM
Thank you very much for a wonderful placement in your contest Constance. I was inspired to write a poem for it. It must have been challenging to judge. Much appreciated! xxoo : )
Date: 10/2/2018 12:25:00 PM
Beautiful! Reflection of the beauty, but accompanied by sadness. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 10/1/2018 9:02:00 PM
Beautifully done Connie. A story with remembering. Sometimes I wish I could forget certain things, but then I realize how important life’s lessons are.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2018 9:48:00 PM
I agree, we learn from everyone who touches our lives. Thank you my friend. : )
Date: 10/1/2018 2:24:00 PM
Such exquisitely wistful and enchanting poetry, Connie. Beautifully pensive and romantic reverie of a love unable to be sustained and lost. Congratulations on your wonderful win.. ~Susan
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2018 2:37:00 PM
Thank you very much Susan. Some people are meant to be in our lives such a short time, but they always dwell in memory. : )
Date: 9/30/2018 2:19:00 PM
This melancholy poem is so beautifully written, Connie, Congrats on your win. John
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2018 2:39:00 PM
Thank you very much John. One never forgets their first love, it's true. : )
Date: 9/30/2018 9:21:00 AM
Love's serenity split apart by a tempest..Congrats on your win Connie..
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Date: 10/1/2018 2:41:00 PM
Perfectly described Joseph. Thank you very much. : )
Date: 9/30/2018 6:57:00 AM
Heartfelt congratulations to you Connie well done xxoo
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2018 2:42:00 PM
Thank you very much Mike. Have a great week. My daughter is flying in for a visit today. : )
Date: 9/30/2018 5:40:00 AM
beautifully written and heartfelt, congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/30/2018 5:05:00 AM
Your first Enclosed Rhyme poem has done you proud, Connie:) Congratulations on being a worthy winner! Regards // paul
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Date: 9/30/2018 4:44:00 AM
I beautifully and blissfully started my day with your gripping and solacing memories of beauty and love dear Connie! Indeed, the sweet and loving reveries of the past provide balm for our heartaches.. A great pleasure to read. My deepest regards. Be blessed always.
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Date: 9/29/2018 10:30:00 PM
Great captivating first line, so sad and yearning, congratulations on your win!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/29/2018 11:15:00 PM
Thank you Michelle. This is my first enclosed rhyme! : )
Date: 9/29/2018 7:10:00 PM
A nostalgic beauty, Connie. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/29/2018 9:23:00 PM
Thank you very much Line. : )
Date: 9/29/2018 4:37:00 PM
Our waning years become fragile to the urge that leads us back in time through memories, many of which remain vivid, as this beautiful poem goes to prove, Connie. Fortunately love and passion did not blind your judgment! A fave ! Regards // paul
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Date: 9/29/2018 9:23:00 PM
Thank you very much for the fave and your lovely comment Paul. I appreciate the support my friend. This id my first ever enclosed rhyme! : )
Date: 9/23/2018 2:51:00 PM
This is both a beautiful yet, heart-rending poem. There are often so many "if only" stories each one of us holds hidden away. It is good to share, and often helps another.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/23/2018 4:37:00 PM
Thank you Carrie. It is all part of growing and learning life. : )
Date: 9/22/2018 9:40:00 PM
Hopefully this is a fictional piece. it is quite touching and evocative. Good luck in the contest Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/22/2018 1:58:00 AM
How lovely, Connie, and sad. Beautifully put together. Good luck! Viv x
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Date: 9/21/2018 10:51:00 AM
Superb writing my friend...enclosed within our hearts...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 9/20/2018 11:48:00 PM
Your first 'enclosed rhyme'? I'm so new at this poetry stuff, I'll have to find out what your talking about. I couldn't say it any better than Joe D. comments. So touching!
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Date: 9/20/2018 6:36:00 PM
this is so gorgeous, Connie . One of your best rhyming poems ever and it's filled with such sincere emotion . Fave
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/20/2018 7:21:00 PM
Thank you very much Andrea, especially for the fave. I believe this is my first enclosed rhyme I have ever written. It was a challenge for me.; ) xxoo
Date: 9/20/2018 6:12:00 PM
Wonderfully written and sadly such things do happen with relationships. But you've depicted it all, so well.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/20/2018 7:22:00 PM
Thank you very much M.L. It is my first. : )
Date: 9/20/2018 1:15:00 PM
Of all the things that should have been...Wonderful write Connie.
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