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coloured leaves swirling falling from tall swaying trees joining rose petals and snapped windswept flower heads carpeting the threadbare lawn Jack Horne, 7th September, for Francine’s View contest

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Kash Poet

Date: 9/8/2011 8:07:00 AM

Very nice imagery here jack.Enjoyed reading it.Best wishes:

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/8/2011 1:05:00 AM

jack, yours is short but in my opinion is one of the BEST and so poetic. I really love it.Thanks for all your comments. I can't do many comments to you like i want to due to my back hurting after staying here so long. I hope to see many more new poems from you, however. LUv, Andrea

Jack Ross Jr.

Date: 9/7/2011 10:43:00 PM

Lovely write very colorful....your mate....old Jack

John Smith

Date: 9/7/2011 10:08:00 PM

Colorful, poetic picture of fall as it slips to winter.

Kyle Kriticos

Date: 9/7/2011 8:24:00 PM

I like that it's actually soothing jack. Thank you for posting!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/7/2011 6:11:00 PM

Reads like a winner to me..I can just see the fall scene..Good luck in Francine's contest..Thanks for stopping by and leaving a kind review..Sara

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/7/2011 5:39:00 PM

A nice view it is my friend... very enjoyed.. MIchael

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/7/2011 5:26:00 PM

A vivid portrait of your view, very descriptive. Good luck in the contest! Kim

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/7/2011 4:59:00 PM

Fantastic imagery you have here Jack! This is a great poem, with a great line..."carpeting the threadbare lawn"!! I love that line!! You'll do well in the contest!!