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My Unique Line - Ad

Three lines from Sonnet 191: "The Waiting Sleep" I'm drifting with the leaves as they change hue, concealed among them as they fall to ground. And as they crumble, I'll be crumbling too. . . I could never really narrow down to just one favorite poem or line, so I chose lines from a sonnet giving my feeling about the 2nd phase of my life: after 50! Above all things in a poem, I appreciate imagery and this was me trying to use unique imagery with personification. For THE MOST IMPRESSIVE LINE YOU EVER THOUGHT OF ... AND WHAT MAKES IT UNIQUE~ Poetry Contest BY P.D.

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John Watt

Date: 10/6/2020 9:22:00 PM

I couldn't find a sonnet of yours called "The Waiting Sleep". Is it not on Soup? Maybe under a different name? Just curious, I'd like to read it.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/7/2020 3:13:00 PM

I know it's on here somewhere. . Will have to figure out new title which I may have changed to meet a new challenge requirement. I think crumbling leaves is still defining me!!

John Watt

Date: 10/6/2020 9:18:00 PM

I like it, using the crumbling leaves as a metaphor for your own life. I wonder what you would choose 9 years later as your 'most impressive line'?

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/4/2012 9:50:00 PM

I'm actually trying to keep up with comments through contest right now. I had fun closing all 3 of my contest. Thank you...PD

Spandan Karmakar

Date: 12/26/2011 2:19:00 AM

Nice poem! I am 13 years old.I will be 14 in next june........spandan.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/7/2011 12:59:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Impressive Line"contestAndrea . Love, Carol

Joe Maverick

Date: 11/6/2011 10:52:00 AM

Yes i could "feel the vibe" here Andrea, well worked piece here, so good to read your words..

Dinda Minardi

Date: 11/6/2011 7:45:00 AM

yeah i love this imagery... especially your first line... goodluck in the contest, Andrea :) thanx for stopping by on my 'Not Into You' the first language is in Bahasa (Indonesian)

Jack Horne

Date: 11/6/2011 6:42:00 AM

Very lovely lines, Andrea. And I see it was a winner too. Well done indeed

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 11/6/2011 12:08:00 AM

Woah! I agree. This is real smooth! Are you really over 50 yrs young. You seem 30. That's coming from a 35 yr old man who acts 25 and looks 55! C O N G R A T S!

Ray Dillard

Date: 11/5/2011 10:52:00 PM

Very nicely written....and, all too easy to understand at our age. I wanted to say my best line was "Let's make little athletes", which you will recognize from my book. Unfortunately, it was from a short story that wasn't printed here. I like to think of the line as a self-fulfilling prophecy. The kids were super athletes and now both coach. See ya! RAY

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/5/2011 10:25:00 PM

hello andrea.. again.. ;-) CONGRATULATIONS, thank you for supporting my contest... I'm just dropping by to give everyone a warm congratulations and gratitude from the heart. ((you may get this comment more than once, if you entered more than one of my contest this week)) Have a wonderful weekend, GOD BLESS,..p.d. ~sorry i have to leave the same comment.. lol.. i read all this yesterday,..p.d.

Don Johnson

Date: 11/5/2011 9:14:00 PM

as they crumble im crumbling too....sublime babe...

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/5/2011 5:46:00 PM

Congrats Andrea on a big win with this phenom line luv..

Nancy Jones

Date: 11/5/2011 12:10:00 PM

Ooooh, that's very beautiful, Andrea! Crumble slowly, yeah? Grats, have a beauty weekend~N

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 11/4/2011 8:02:00 PM

Enjoyed the line from that sonnet. Just to let you know I have a new grandson Aaron Alexander born Nov. 3. I am so lucky. love phyl

Robert Johnson

Date: 11/3/2011 3:28:00 PM

I'm tired.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/3/2011 2:04:00 PM

Oh yes, excellent use of imagery here, Andrea. As we get older we do feel like we're crumbling and fading away. Seniors deserve more attentionin our society. Very thought provoking lines. Best wishes in PD's contest! Love, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/3/2011 12:10:00 PM

Way to go for choosing these lines of yours, Andrea! Not only does it have a striking imagery, the metaphors really stand out as well! I really liked this! Hugs to you, sweetie :D

Kash Poet

Date: 11/3/2011 11:02:00 AM

Very meaningful lines here.I am smiling at Tony's comment here...I thnk he meant 50 degree Farenhite equals 10 degree Celcius of Temp.He has such a sense of humour.(Hey lady,stay girl:)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/3/2011 8:15:00 AM

Those few lines could mean so many different things..A person facing a really bad set of circumstances in their life, facing death, or as you state a change of life from one era to another..Enjoyed reading your sure winner..Good luck in PD's contest...Sara

Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/3/2011 8:16:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by my blog..Sara

Tony Lane

Date: 11/3/2011 6:32:00 AM

50F is only 10 C. Tony

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/3/2011 6:24:00 AM

The best to you in the contest Andrea. Have yourself a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Sarah Seraphin

Date: 11/2/2011 11:48:00 PM

* “I Can't Help Myself Whenever I Find That Your Gifted Beauty Has Postes A Poem * My Dear Sweet Beautiful Andrea * Sometimes When I Hear Your Voice As I Read * Tranquillity & Beauty Flow Inside * Your Voice Is Sooo Beautiful * My Luv, Always * Sarah.” *