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My Shortcomings

MY SHORTCOMINGS ARE OVERWHELMING - HOWEVER MY STRENGTHS ARE DEFEATING THEM - POETRY CONTEST
I stood there, ...slowly... I removed my clothes... you could tell that my date who was  about to see me naked for the first time  was...was...well...EXCITED! I was worried she would slide off her seat. shirt? gone! sexy... pants? gone! sexy... one piece long underwear? an obvious crowd pleaser I did not time it but it was a long time for her to get over her joy. at one point I think she stopped breathing she was definitely moved there were tears in her eyes I believe her hysteria was a nervous laugh she was laughing hard. long underwear? gone! finally naked I stood there exposed the look on her face  was not good, I am sure I could hear, a song blaring loudly in her mind "Is that all there is, is that all there is..." My shortcomings are overwhelming, I was embarrassed  I was angry I wanted to be mature about the situation, immediately, instantly, I stuck my tongue out at her, my twelve inch tongue, I think she noticed I could breathe through my ears her face lit up  once again she fell off her seat My shortcomings are overwhelming, both naked I started pleasing her she yells  "there is a God!" However my strengths are defeating them. that's it, Ok  you can leave now, Goodbye excuse me this next part is private, LEAVE!
17~10~2014 I am entering this write in the contest. When I saw the title of the contest this came to mind. I thought humor being my greatest strenght I would write this in an attempt to overcome my deppression thank you for the oppurtunity Verena. Laughter is the best medicine...unless your a diabetic... ....and then insulin...insulin is the best medicine. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/19/2014 12:23:00 AM
Congratulations Maurice for your high marks in my contest. A first place win you grace... Verlena
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Date: 11/15/2014 1:45:00 PM
Fun exchange of view point, congratulations on your win
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Date: 11/12/2014 7:01:00 PM
I did not see this until it came out a winner, how time played it on me and made now my smile ,you totally dug it out Maurice and multiplied smile on my face,kudos for a job well done and congrats on the win.
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Date: 11/11/2014 9:37:00 AM
Nicely crafted poem, congrats on the win
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Date: 11/10/2014 5:09:00 PM
with short comings like that it is good to have humor as your long suit. This is, as the true Bostonians say, WICKED PISSA!! loved the humor.
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Date: 11/10/2014 3:59:00 PM
Dropping back with my congratulations Maurice.
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Date: 11/10/2014 3:26:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Maurice - so so pleased you entered this in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/10/2014 2:53:00 AM
my lips slowly curved upward, then it reached my eyes...upper teeth showed afterwards,,and till now i can't stop laughing. no question you have humor and words just flow naturally for you!! even your notes made me smile! Congratulations!!
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Date: 10/18/2014 10:06:00 PM
Maurice, this is well original creative, and I have to say, you took the tongue right out of my mouth!!!!!!!
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Date: 10/18/2014 5:09:00 PM
Haha...love it...now get your tongue out of my ear......people are watching
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Date: 10/18/2014 8:20:00 AM
You have to enter this one Maurice! Someone told me you are hung like a horse but I was not aware that they meant a sea horse *lol* did I laugh out loud??? So sorry! Please do not give me a tongue lashing! All jokes aside, this is frigging brilliant. P.S. you are the only person I know who can lick his own eyebrows!
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Date: 10/18/2014 7:34:00 AM
truly maurie i cap my hands excellent pen pal
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Date: 10/17/2014 10:11:00 PM
hahaha, you are such a riot, Maurice. And then even your footnote!! You should try your hand at comedy too!! You are multi talented. Wasn't three your number? It is SO fitting if it is!!!
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Date: 10/17/2014 5:49:00 PM
you really broke the ice, Maurice.. I'm still laughing hard over your innuendos... lol!.. had a good time!.. huggs
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Date: 10/17/2014 5:08:00 PM
This is funny Maurice or should I say Gene Simmons.
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Date: 10/17/2014 5:04:00 PM
You are a riot..I want to have a glass of wine with you and bust a gut laughing. BG I agree, put it in the contest. !
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Date: 10/17/2014 4:51:00 PM
I definately HOPE this is in the contest... It's great!
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Date: 10/17/2014 4:42:00 PM
HAHAHAHA OH man you make me laugh! I enjoy your humor, it is refreshing! :)
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Date: 10/17/2014 3:47:00 PM
Too funny....that is why we like to undress in the dark ...lol Good Luck in the contest. SuZ
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Date: 10/17/2014 3:34:00 PM
This one is fun. Have you read Charles Bukowsky? You're not like him, but your rambling style is fascinating like Bukowsky's. I always enjoy your individuality. You're not afraid to be yourself. and unlike so many you have something to say. Love, daver
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2014 3:40:00 PM
hear hear Daver! hugs jan xxx
Date: 10/17/2014 3:16:00 PM
Maurice I am so so so pleased you posted this hilarious write - we need more humour in soup:-) Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xxxxx its a 7 and faves for when i need a real belly laugh
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