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My Rainbow

"Rain, Trudi, Golden-Heart. Raven-haired beauty! One sweet smile, spied above rest. Melted my hoar-frost heart. Every star's brilliance, pales. My joy, will never have, more cause. Her flashing eyes, locks, shame velvetiest o-nights!"

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Darlene Gifford

Date: 6/22/2015 6:14:00 AM

Young love. your feelings are well expressed here. And I also welcome you to poetry soup. ~~Darlene

Todd Holjeson
Date: 6/22/2015 12:07:00 PM

Thanks. Not so young, LOL, though, more like going through menopause;-] gotta love those hot-flashes. Haha. Sadly, it didn't even make a dent in the shield, enshrouding her heart. :-( at least, so it would seem. She didn't even say thank you. LOL.....Must not have been all that good. Oh well, not the first mad, aspiring writer to make a fool of themselves with a poem, I guess. :-] I'm more of a pulp-fiction writer, actually. Thanks again

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/21/2015 1:25:00 PM

- Welcome to P Soup, Todd ! - A poem that warms your heart or relieve your pain ... share your own poems here with us - Write poems and send it out into the world, I look forward to your next poem :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Todd Holjeson
Date: 6/21/2015 1:40:00 PM

Thank you, ever so much. You all have been so wonderful, in welcoming me. I sincerely appreciate it. Warmest of regards, Todd Holjeson.

Skat A

Date: 6/21/2015 1:35:00 AM

Hi Todd, this is a sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Todd Holjeson
Date: 6/21/2015 1:41:00 AM

Thanks. I am in my last year of college, seeking my BS English. 46. And new to poetry.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/21/2015 12:46:00 AM

Hello Todd, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Todd Holjeson
Date: 6/21/2015 12:50:00 AM

Thanks, I appreciate the warm welcome. Respectfully, Todd.

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/20/2015 11:53:00 PM

Bright and joyful first submission,Todd. Well done. Welcome to Poetry soup. I'm sure you will enjoy your time here. Regards, Viv

Viv Wigley
Date: 6/21/2015 1:08:00 AM

I make the count 51, Todd, the lines being 1,2,3,5,7,6,7,8,12, but you don't have to be strict to form, otherwise your effort wouldn't have worked so well. If you follow the rule of line one being one syllable, line two you add another syllable and so on, to get 1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10 making fifty five, you'd have ruined a perfectly good poem. Me, I only have enough fingers to cope with Haiku :). You'll find many poets often stray from true form, especially with Limericks,so just enjoy yourself. Good luck with your studies.

Todd Holjeson
Date: 6/20/2015 11:56:00 PM

Thanks, never considered myself much of an effective poet. LOL. Love stirred me, and, I'm in the last year seeking my BS English. Thought I'd give it a try. Did I get the syllable count, 55, right?