My Prayer

Dear God Well you didn't expect to hear from me did you! Guess I don’t talk to you often enough Forgive me I have so much on my mind but you already know that Dad is dying but he’s happy he knows where he is going Can you have a word with St Peter for me please? Get him to make dads final journey a peaceful one And can you look after dad please Make sure he has a supply of plain chocolate in heaven He won’t be entirely happy without it We will try our best to look after mum when he’s gone Although I think she may want to join dad pretty quickly After fifty-eight years together it will be so so hard for her Please look after them both please God Amen 5th September 2014 Written for Prayer Contest Sponsor: Regina Riddle ~awarded 4th place~

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Verlena S. Walker

Date: 9/8/2014 2:41:00 AM

Beautifully written Jan. Congratulations on winning in the contest! Verlena

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2014 7:57:00 AM

Many thanks verlena:-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/7/2014 7:23:00 PM

It's all from the heart Jan. Even the chocolate. XXOO CONGRATULATIONS.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2014 1:02:00 AM

Thanks as ever Brenda:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/7/2014 6:06:00 PM

A down to business prayer. Your requests shouldn't be too tough for God. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2014 1:01:00 AM

thanks for the lovely comment Joyce. Hugs Jan x

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/7/2014 6:50:00 AM

And back again wid huge congrats on ur winning awesome prayer Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2014 7:18:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/7/2014 5:56:00 AM

- Congratulations on your winning poem in the contest "Prayer" - A lovely and moving prayer and a pleasure to read,Jan - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/7/2014 5:21:00 AM

The words have dropped from your heart, Jan. Congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2014 7:17:00 AM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Dr Mehta:-) Hugs jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/6/2014 11:50:00 PM

Congratulations with MUCH love and many prayers for your father. With God all things are possible so is healing. I love you. Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2014 3:45:00 AM

Thanks for awarding my simple but heartfelt prayer 4th place Regina - this one is for Dad :-) Love and hugs Jan xxx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/6/2014 2:34:00 PM

ohh, this is so honestly composed.. a beautiful prayer, jan.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 2:36:00 PM

Its written from the heart Nette that is the most important thing:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 9/6/2014 1:40:00 PM

You are a very good boy, so you are praying for your parents. An excellent heartfelt poem it's. Good luck. God bless you all the time. Loved always,bl

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 2:35:00 PM

No worries you made me have a big smile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath
Date: 9/6/2014 2:08:00 PM

Hi! sweetie. Sorry

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 2:04:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment BL - I am actually female so you have made me smile :-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2014 3:45:00 AM

what a thoughtful and heartfelt prayer/poem. I love it , Jan. I know how hard this is for you and I know God will hear your prayer. Soupmail.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 4:11:00 AM

Thanks Andrea it is written straight from the heart - simple like me LOl Hugs Jan XX

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/5/2014 11:34:00 PM

Jan this is simply beautiful!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 3:10:00 AM

Thanks Arthur - it is simple but written from the heart :-) Hugs Jan xxx

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/5/2014 4:47:00 PM

Aww sweetie, I love the thing about chocolate, it is great to have the loving attitude that you have, and that he has, the comfort in this situations, there is so much love it shines in your words. hugs my friend xx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 4:58:00 PM

Yes there is even humour in this write - despite being diabetic dad just loves his plain chocolate and there is always a bar on his coffee table. Our dentist came to his 90th birthday even she brought him a bar of Bournville... but I did have to tell her which shop to buy it from! Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/5/2014 4:14:00 PM

I believe God expected to hear from you because he knows your heart. I ask God to comfort you and your family in your hour of need. I add my thanks that your parents know God, for death will hold no power over them. Amen.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 4:19:00 PM

Thank you for your comforting words and your prayers a re so appreciated Richard. My concern is not for dad it is for mum but we will cross that problem when the time comes:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Faye Gibson

Date: 9/5/2014 4:07:00 PM

And, God, please bless Jan. Give her strength and courage and the blessing of Your presence.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 4:09:00 PM

Thanks Faye I feel so blessed simply to be here and writing poems and having such support from amazing friends all over the world:-) Hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/5/2014 1:42:00 PM

Dear Jan, Your sad letter to God touched my heart. Too well I know the angst of having one parent outlive the other. It would be very difficult for a spouse of 58 years to move forward after losing their mate. Having chocolate in heaven was a very sweet reference. May your prayer be welcomed and honored by Regina. Love, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 1:56:00 PM

Its written from the heart Carolyn and it was therapeutic to write it so however it does it is a dedication to my dad and that is the ost important thing :-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/5/2014 12:14:00 PM

That's a lovely prayer Jan! God bless u all!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 12:35:00 PM

Thank you so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/5/2014 11:29:00 AM

A beautiful prayer that most likely be answered.....They are lucky to have such a loving daughter..... Hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 11:34:00 AM

Thanks as ever Tim for all your support. You are a wonderful friend Iam truly blessed to have you in my life:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/5/2014 10:47:00 AM

If this is true - I will pray too. I hope it is just for the contest. Bless you and your parents too... Lucilla

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 11:18:00 AM

Sadly its totally true Lucilla. My Dad was diagnosed with terminal cancer at the beginning of June - hes 90 now mum 92 in November:-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/5/2014 10:28:00 AM

Jan, either I have tears from laughing at your poetry or in this case moved by it.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 10:31:00 AM

I do try and write with humour Brenda but this one came straight from the heart - there is a touch of humour - the thought of chocolate in heaven oh he would love that! Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/5/2014 10:25:00 AM

Beautiful Jan. God Bless Your Parents. God Bless You. Lots of Love.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 10:29:00 AM

Thanks Maurice I do appreciate your wonderful comment:-) love and hugs back Jan xxx

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/5/2014 10:07:00 AM

Heartwarming & truly reflective in its roots. Most importantly, these lines came from the heart.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 10:18:00 AM

Thank you so much for the comment the poem is written straight from the heart:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 9/5/2014 9:56:00 AM

Beautiful prayer, Jan. This is indeed a winner, my friend! I am sure God listens to our pleas! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 10:17:00 AM

Thanks Pandita for the lovely feedback:-) Hugs jan xx